英语竞赛作文修改
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老师推荐参加高二英语竞赛。请帮助修改理顺润色一下。万分感谢。

1、 帮忙想一个标题,尽量不要是“my views of American TV dramas”这种的 = =

2、 保持主要的意思,修改一下一些句子和单词。为了追求高级一点的词汇,我在写这篇小文章的时候有

一些单词可能用的不恰当。

3、 帮忙更改一下句式,例如我里面有好几个“we can„„”重复了很多次,有没有这种相同意思的句式,

可以帮忙修改上(但得符合高二年级的水平- -)

4、 竞赛一轮截稿时间是:12月20日,希望您能在12月18日(本周三)前改完发回(我还需要给老师

看一下)

注:修改(修改的地方用不同的字号表示一下),我想看一个修改前后的对比,万分感谢!

Title:? The Amazing American TV dramas

Nowadays, more and more people, especially the English learners are keen on some American

TV dramas .As this tendency widely spread, it attracted several different kind of,reactions .Some people

enjoyed the fantastic stories while others just regarded it as a sheer waste of time.

As far as I am concerned, I would prefer the former one. In terms of American TV drama

watching, there are several great advantages, one of which is that it enables to strengthen our spoken

English. When I was a little boy, I used to watch some catoons, in which Chinese idioms are used here

and there. As time went on, one day I could even actually blurt out some idioms learned from the

cartoons. That really surprised my parents. So I believe that watching American TV dramas can also be

helpful for us to cultivate our sense of spoken English unconsciously. Maybe some day it is hard for us to

prevent some English dialogues from popping out.

In addition, our listening skills can also be enhanced through the joyful watching. There is much

slang in the TV dramas and many dialogues are perfectly concise. Maybe we could hardly understand it

clearly right at the same time when we were watching. But it is easy for us to comprehend the general

ideas approximately, or to recognise some words that we are familiar with. Yet days and months

multiplying, their conversations may come to our mind naturally and thus our ability of listening can rise

to a new degree!

What ’s more, American TV dramas are usually basing on the normal life of ordinary citizens. The

situations thereon can contribute to our knowledge about the life in America. We would gradually learn a

lot as their social conditions, history, habits in life and cultural phenomenon exhibit in front of us.

Moreover, many interesting meanings which can be found in the dramas are different from the English

we learned in school. Take “busboy ” for instance, it means the workers who do some cleaning in a

restaurant rather than “the boy on the bus”. Therefore, American TV drama watching can enrich our

knowledge capital and help us to master American culture well both of which would be beneficial to our

future if we want to go abroad.

Furthermore, sometimes we can enjoy the life together with the characters in the dramas, learn many different life philosophies from their stories and certainly develop a new hobby and share more topics with friends. With full communications we can make more friends. By the way, watching American TV dramas is also a great way to relax ourselves.

Instead of learning English with difficulty, I would rather master it through an easy way. In addition, watching American TV dramas presents us with not only different cultures but also native English expression, which is the key to having a good command of English.

注:文章从整体布局到用词都真真高水平。我的修改主要偏重上下文连贯上,至于有的词组等的使用,例如Maybe some day it is hard for us to prevent some English dialogues from popping out,如果你不习惯,可以找一个更加得心应手的来替换。说实话,你的水平已经不止高二了。