刘烁阳英语作文笔记
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The past several years have witnessed a phenomenon that a variety of promises have been arising from all walks of life . Regrettably, quite a lot of promises are sheer nonsense, just as the hen in the given cartoon commits herself to lay eggs which are round without any angles and corners and have shells, egg whites and yolks.

Odds and funny as they sound, such false promises can be seen and heard everywhere in our country. perform their tasks effectively and fairly without taking any bribes; out products of good quality; c provide genuine commodities and polite and enthusiastic services. Can you find anything new and substantial other than their obligations, duties and jobs in these so called promises? I guess your answer will be negative. As a matter of fact, their intention to make such commitments is nothing but to put on civilized outer clothing to please or deceive the public.

I dare say that your society is suffering corruption and cheat which are causing damage to society both materially and morally . But the hen and her like should know that by dishonest words no one can survive the intense competition under market economy system . They shou ld remember the old saying, “Honesty is the best policy”.

Here is an interesting cartoon: With her head held high, maybe singing, a hen stands proudly in the cartoon of the picture with a notice in hand. It says: “Firstly, I promise that the eggs I lay are absolutely round without any square corners. Secondly, they all have shells and cores.” It’s so ridiculous that we can’t help laughing. But after that there must be something left.

Recently, many promises have come up in many walks of life, especially the service departments. They promise you that they will provide you with warm smile service and good products. At first you are moved nearly to thank them. But if you think twice, you may wonder if those should be their duties. It goes without saying that factories should produce goods of quality, department stores should serve customers politely, buses should arrive on time, and so forth, because all of these are their responsibilities. But why should they promise what are their due jobs? One reason may be that they want to correct their past mistakes under the planned economic system. Another is that they intend to improve their images and please the customers.

In my opinion, trying to be better is worth welcoming, but making empty promises is unacceptable. If factories, stores and administrations do their jobs well rather than talk nonsense, our society will be more prosperous.

As far as I am concerned, I believe that this phenomenon is not a good thing, but with the reform and open door policy being carried out, and with the development of our national economy, these problems will be solved step by step. I am sure my opinion is sound and well-grounded It will only be a matter of time before the problem becomes things of the past. 解决问题的万能结尾句。

The past several years have witnessed a phenomenon that a variety of promises have been arising from all walks of life .

The situation being so serious, it is high time that we took effective measures to ……

It is important/ necessary/ urgent +that +(should)+do

我们必须制订(work out)一些法律法规(laws and regulations)来解决这个问题。

It is imperative that laws and regulations should be worked out to …… It will only be a matter of time before the problem becomes things of the past.

万能开头句

There has been a heated discussion about a picture in the newspaper. ⏹ Cartoon, photograph, drawing Magazine, journal

⏹ In no country other than China, it has been said, is the problem of more serious.

The past several years have witnessed a phenomenon that a variety

of promises have been arising from all walks of life .

The past decade a huge development the reform and open door policy being carried out, problems at the same time, with 在过去十年间,由于改革开放政策的执行,我国的经济有了巨大的发展,但同时带来了一些问题,而下面的问题是最严重的。

As is shown in the picture

⏹ Shown, depicted, drawn

⏹ Picture, cartoon, drawing, photograph

⏹ Clearly, Vividly, ridiculously, interestingly…

⏹ 开始真正描写图画:

⏹ , 周围有 ⏹ 可以使用倒装

⏹ 主语与前文一致, 可使用非限定性定语从句或者现在分词 ⏹ 介词作伴随结构

As is shown in the cartoon, in the darkness happily stands a candle. It spreads brightness around 爱心灯

As is shown in the cartoon, in the darkness happily stands a candle, spreading brightness around itself.

Just as an old Arab proverb says, where there is love, there is hope.

传统服饰

As is vividly shown in the photo, in the sunshine stands a pretty American girl, (who is ) in Chinese traditional clothes, wearing necklace and its like, with a sweet smile on her face.

跑步

As is shown in the cartoon, on the playground runs a young man, rushing to the final, which is defined as another start one. Tired as he is, he has to continue his journey optimistically.

养老足球赛

In the middle of the picture lies an old man.

⏹ He crouches like a football,

⏹ they are guarding their homes respectively and refusing to take care of their father.

In the middle of the picture lies an old man, crouching like a football, respectively and refusing to take care of their father.

小贝头

⏹ As is vividly drawn in the picture, in the chair sits a young man, having his hair trim as cool as David Beckham.

温室花朵

⏹ in the green house stands a delicate flower, growing vigorously, with the shelter protecting it from the brush of the storm.

⏹ When removed out of the protection, the flower cannot stand the storm and quickly dies, with its leaves falling in the wind.

总结

Simple as the picture is, the symbolic meaning is as deep as ocean. 凑字被选或放于第二段开头

The author’s real purpose is not the fact itself, but to lead us to find what hides behind the ice burg.

万能开头 如图所示,非谓语动词,with 伴随结构 总结

第二段 意义阐释段

可能一 各个寓意 二 寓意阐释现实生活

⏹ 本体be revealed as喻体

⏹ is referred to as

⏹ 喻体 be associated with本体

⏹ refer to, stand for, indicate, epitomize成为(某事物) 的缩影 ⏹ 请注意单复数的使用

⏹ Symbolically, the delicate flower is naturally associated with the youth, Who are overprotected by their parents,

⏹ Who are revealed as the greenhouse,

⏹ It protects them from brush of storms,

⏹ Which epitomizes the fierce competition in the real world.

Symbolically , the delicate flower is naturally associated with the youth, overprotected by their parents, who are revealed as the greenhouse, protecting them from brush of storms, which epitomizes the intense competition in the real world.

二 寓意阐释现实生活

拓展段落方法

1科学论据法According to a survey

⏹ According to one of the latest survey conducted by a certain international organization,…

According to one of the latest survey, money spent on pets in the city of Paris is as much as $1,000,000,000, which can feed all the Japanese in the world for a whole year.

which can help millions of children finish their primary school.

⏹ 每年,法国巴黎市民花费在养狗上的费用价值$1,000,000美元,可以够日本人吃一年的!

2举例子

1将个别例子变为普遍例子的方法

⏹ Suppose there is a family

⏹ For example, for instance

引出例子

Our human history has been filled with a variety of examples of …, with the following one being the foremost.

Among all the touching facts relating to … that I have heard, noticed, and experienced, the most impressive one is …

我们人类历史上与这个话题相关的例子有很多,下面这个是最有说服力的.

在我所听到的,看到的,经历过的所有和这个话题相关的例子之中,最有说服力的是……

3虚拟语气

好的情况

⏹ 假设如果没有,那么。。。

⏹ If there were no such policy, we would never taste KFC. ⏹ 坏的情况

⏹ 如果继续下去,那么我们将付出昂贵的代价。

⏹ If the situation were to continue, we would pay a high price. 虚拟语气省略倒装

If there were no such policy, we would never taste KFC.

⏹ Were there no opening policy, we would never taste Macdonalds at all.

⏹ Were there no opening policy, never would we taste KFC.

⏹ If the situation were to continue, we would pay a high price. ⏹ Were the situation to continue, we would pay a high price. 爱心是灯 例子

希望工程 义务献血 照顾老年人

我们人类历史上与爱心相关的例子有很多,希望工程是最有说服力的。Our human history has been filled with a variety of examples of …, with the following one being the foremost.

Our human history has been filled with a variety of examples of love, with the Hope Project being the foremost

在中国西部有一些家庭,他们是如此的贫困以至于无法资助孩子上学。In the west of China exist some families, being so poor that hardly can they support their children’s education

尽管他们很可怜,但是来自各个行业的人们向他们伸出了援助之手,这就是所谓的希望工程。Pathetic as they are, people (who are) coming from all walks of life began to help them, which is so called Hope Project.

根据一项调查,每年希望工程所募集的资金价值¥。。。,这些钱可以。。。

According to the latest survey, money collected annually has reached as much as about $1,000,000,000, which can help 3 million children finish their primary school.

如果没有这些帮助,那么这些孩子将永远无法得到宝贵的知识,永远生活在黑暗之中。

Were there no such precious help, never would those children taste the knowledge and live in the darkness forever.

单独一段举例子用的。

个人评价段

好地现象During the process we should absorb the essence and neglect the drawbacks.

坏的现象 情况如此危急,解决这个问题刻不容缓。

The situation being so serious, it is high time that we took effective measures to solve the problem.

首先,我们必须制订一些法律和法规。

⏹On the one hand, it is essential that laws and regulations should be worked out.

第二,个人应该被教育。。。

⏹On the other, people should be educated to …

伴随着一个恰当的法律和警觉的民众,这个问题迟早可以被解决。 ⏹With a proper law and an alert public, it will only be a matter of time before the problem becomes things of the past.

⏹Only in a reasonable, prosperous and healthy atmosphere can we the uttermost. 也可以放在取其精华去其糟粕。

⏹第一段描述图画(废话式开头+倒装描写图画+总结)

⏹第二段,指出图画的寓意 --举例子(拓展段落的三个方法)

⏹第三段,发表评论。--解决方法

(虚拟+倒装) 有阳光的地方就有阴影

描述图画

⏹ There has been a heated discussion about a picture in the newspaper. As is shown above, in the sun shine stands a delicate tree, growing vigorously, leaving a long shadow behind itself. Just as the old Arab proverb says, where there is sunshine, there is a shadow.

阐释寓意

⏹ Simple as the picture is, the symbolic meaning is as deep as ocean. Our human history has been filled with a variety of examples about sunshine and its shadow, with the following one being the foremost. The past decade has witnessed a huge development in economy owing to the sunshine -policies being carried out, bringing its shadow at the same time -the damage to the environment. According to a survey, money lost in environmental pollution has reached $1,000,000,000, which can help millions of children finish their primary school. Were the tendency to continue, we would pay a high price.

⏹Were the tendency to continue, our future generation would not bother to think of excuse for us.

解决问题 The situation being so serious, it is high time that we took effective measures to solve/ address t he problem. On the one hand, it is essential that laws and regulations should be worked out. On the other, people should be educated. With a proper law and an alert public, it will only be a matter of time before the problem becomes things of the past. Only in a reasonable, prosperous and healthy atmosphere can we hope to witness 也可以放在取其精华去其糟粕。

教授图

描述图画

There has been a heated discussion about a picture in the newspaper. As is shown above, on the thick pile of papers, proudly stands an old professor, seeming satisfied with his success, neglecting the demand of students.

阐释寓意 Simple as the picture is, the symbolic meaning is as deep as ocean. The past decade has witnessed a huge development in education owing to some policies being carried out, bringing some problems at the same time, with the above one being the foremost. According to a survey, the number of papers published in 2006 is 10 times as much as that of 1996, with the students’ ability remaining still. Were the situation to continue, we would pay a high price.

个人评价--解决这个问题

The situation being so serious, it is high time that we took effective measures to solve the problem. On the one hand, it is essential that rules should be worked out to limit the number of the paper published annually; on the other hand, teachers should be educated to pay more attention to students. Only in a prosperous, reasonable atmosphere can we hope to witness the ideal scene in which students can enjoy their study to the uttermost.

There are several ways to address this problem. Laws and regulations should be implemented/make/work out to ban the manufacturing and distribution of fake goods. At the same time, consumers should be educated to enhance the awareness of identify these fake goods. With tough laws and an educated public, fake goods will become a thing of the past.

虚拟语气

⏹学校制订法律法规去限制每年发表论文的数量;

⏹老师们也应该被教育去花更大的精力在学生身上。

⏹只有在一个……的环境下,学生才能尽情体会学习的乐趣。 个人评价素质教育 跑步的图

There has been a picture in the newspaper. As is shown above, on the playground runs a young man, rushing to the final of the full mark of major courses, such as English and so forth, neglecting the importance of morality and its like. Tired as he is, he has to continue his running as his parents’ wishes . Simple as the picture is, the symbolic meaning is as deep as ocean.

What is the purpose of the drawing? The author’s real purpose is not the fact itself, but to lead us to find what hides behind the ice burg. The past decade has witnessed a huge development in education owing to some policies being carried out, bringing some problems at the same time, with the above one being the foremost. According to a survey , the average students’ ability on study has been significantly improved, with the psychological health being worsened. Nowadays, the college has been filled with a variety of examples of such things, with Majiajue being the foremost. Were the situation to continue, we would pay a high price.

The situation being so serious, it is high time that we took effective measures to solve the problem . On the one hand , it is essential that rules should be worked out. On the other hand, teachers should be educated to pay more attention to students ’ education for all-around development. Only in a prosperous, reasonable atmosphere can we hope to witness the ideal scene in which students can enjoy their study to the uttermost.

自信射门There has been a heated discussion about a picture in the newspaper. As is vividly depicted above, in front of the football stands an athlete, imagining the goal keeper is so giant that hardly can he score the goal; on the contrary, the goal keeper minimizes himself and he cannot keep the net at all. Funny as the picture is, the symbolic meaning is as deep as oceans.

What is the intended meaning of the picture? The writer’s real purpose is not the fact itself, but to lead us to discover what hides behind the iceberg. The past decade has witnessed a huge development in society owing to the reform and open door policy being carried out, bringing some problems at the same time, with the youth’s lack of confidence being the foremost. According to the latest survey, over 60% youth get defeated when they meet any difficulty, which leads great social concern.

Among all the touching facts relating to confidence that I have heard, noticed, and experienced, the most impressive one is LiuXiang. As the world sport star, he invariably(无疑) imagines positively that he can win in every hurdle race, never shrinking in front of other experienced players. Had he been afraid of his rivals, never could he make any world record in the Olympic Games. Just as the old Arab proverb says, our final enemy is ourselves.

Only in a strong mind believing in ourselves can we hope to witness the ideal scene, in which we can conquer any difficulties and enjoy the struggle to the uttermost.