六年级下册作文
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小学英语六年级下册各单元作文范例及点评

My friend and I

I’ve got a lovely friend at school. His name is Jack. Jack is 12 years old now. I’m 11. He’s older than me. He’s 150 cm tall. I’m 148 cm. He’s taller and stronger. He’s 43 kg and I’m 41 kg. He’s heavier. We’ve got ro und faces and short hair. But my eyes are bigger and my legs are longer. Our favourite colours are white and blue. We like summer best. We both like sports, too. On Saturdays, we play table tennis. On Sundays, we play basketball. He’s good at basketball. But I do better at table tennis. We laugh and play together. How happy we are!

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写法:这篇作文的题目是“我的朋友和我”。既然写作范围是两个人物,就要笔墨均匀,两者缺一不可。不能只描写朋友,也不能只叙述我。这无形中增加了写作的难度。解决这个难点的关键是:找出两个人几方面的异同。可以通过常见的年龄、身高、体重、外貌、喜好等方面列举出每个人的具体实际情况,再进行比较,通过比较突出每个人物的特点。这样就把人物活灵活现的展现给读者了。

时态:像此类题目的作文,运用一般现在时即可。

句型:因为涉及两个人的比较,不要忘记使用比较级句型:A+be+比较级+than+B。

注意:在列举两个人的“体貌、喜好”等方面情况时,应一边列举,一边比较。不要一味指出不同,还要列举相同之处。两人能成为朋友,一定有共同语言和喜好,共性不容忽视。在表达喜好时,不同的句型应交叉运用,避免枯燥的重

复。例“Our favourite colours are„”,“We like „best ”,“We both like„,too ”,为突出不同时间做不同运动,用“On Saturdays„”,“On Sundays„”,形成鲜明对比。常使用并列连词and 和转折连词 but ,使文章读起来更流畅。结尾以How happy we are!突出了两人从友谊中得到的快乐!

I Have A Bad Cold

I’m not feeling well today. I think I have a bad cold. I have a headache. I have a fever. My nose hurts. My throat is sore. I have to take some medicine and stay in bed. My parents will take me to the hospital. What a bad cold!I hope I can be better soon. And I want to go to school.

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写法:这篇习作是按照时间顺序记叙了得病、病的症状、服药及治疗的全过程。写出了小作者希望快点康复,好去上学的愿望。

时态:这篇文章可以采用一般现在时来写。如果主语是第三人称单数,动词别忘加s 。

句型:要用feel 加形容词,和表示“患某种疾病“的用法have+表示的疾病的单词。

注意:在表示疾病时,可以使用-ache,hurt 和sore 。不要只用一个单词,以避免枯燥。要写出得病后的简单治疗及心情,不能只写得病的情况。常见病句:My nose is hurt。因为be 后面要加形容词,而hurt 是动词,因此应使用sore ;东西放在床上要用on the bed。生病,是卧床不起,应该说stay in bed。 表示吃药时,通过用take some medicine,不用eat 。

词汇量要控制在40~60之间。

Zoom’s Weekend

Zoom had a busy weekend. On Saturday morning, he washed his clothes and went to a park. He did his homework and went fishing on Saturday afternoon. On Sunday morning, he cleaned his room and visited his grandparents. He played football and watch TV on Sunday afternoon. Zoom was too tired.

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写法:这篇习作是按时间顺序记叙了Zoom 的周末活动。

时态:这篇文章可以用三种时态来写,由于本单元主要讲的是一般过去时态,所以我们采用一般过去时态比较合适。

句型:主语+动词过去式+过去时间。

注意:活动的相关表达法采用新旧知识结合的方法,但要注意动词过去式的拼写。

Tom’s Holiday

Tom went to Beijing by plane on his holiday. Every day he had fun with his parents. They went to the Nature Park. They saw elephants. They went swimming. They ate lots of delicious food. They also took many beautiful pictures. They will come back home tomorrow. In a word, they enjoy their holiday.

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写法:这篇习作是按照地点的顺序记叙假期里的活动,记叙了假期里去北京做了哪些活动以及对活动的感受。

时态:这篇文章可采用两种时态来写。由于本单元主要讲述的是一般过去时的用法,所以这里大部分我们采用一般过去时比较合适。

句型:主语+动词过去式+其他„„

主语+will+动词原形+其他„„

注意:活动的相关表达法可采用旧知识和新知识相结合去写,但要注意动词过去式的变化规则。例:eat 的过去式为ate ,为不规则变化。

A Post Card from John

Dear Sarah,

This post card shows you a picture from my holiday. We got Kunming on Wednesday. On the first day we visited Stone Forest. It’s very beautiful. I love it very much. On Thursday Kathy and I got lost in the city. We asked a policeman for help. He helped us find the hotel. On Friday we went to a small village. We saw folk dances and ate some fresh vegetables from the farm. We enjoyed ourselves. Last day we went shopping ane bought some presents for friends. Tomorrow we will be back home.

John

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写法:这是一封明信片,按照时间顺序记叙了约翰假期去昆明度假这几天的活动。分别记叙了游览石林,迷路,看民族舞,购物,买礼物等活动。

时态:这篇文章由于是记叙已经发过的事,所以大部分可以采用一般过去时来写。

句型:主语+动词过去式+其他。

注意:描述已经发生过的事要用一般过去时,在写这篇文章的时候要注意动词的过去式的变化,尤其是动词过去式的不规则变化。没发生过的事要用一般将来时。

A Farewell Party

It’s the end of the school year. The students in Class Three have a farewell party. They invite their parents to the party. Many students have performance at the party.

Look! Chen Jie is singing songs. Zhang Peng is playing the piano. Sarah is playing the erhu. Mike is doing Chinese Kung fu. What is Miss White doing? She is dancing.

Everybody has a lot of fun. But Liu Yun isn’t here. She has a cold. She is at home. The classmates are going to visit her after party. They prepare many gifts fot her. And they will take a picture together.

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写法:这篇习作记叙了一个告别晚会。记叙了学年末的告别晚会上大家都表演

了什么节目,以及晚会后大家要去看望刘芸的故事。

时态:这篇习作可采用三种时态来写。由于本单元主要出现的时态是一般将来时和现在进行时,所以这里我们才用一般现在时,现在进行时和一般将来时来写。

句型:一般现在时:主语+动词原形+其他。

现在进行时:主语+现在分词+其他。

一般将来时:主语+ be going to / will +动词原形+其他。

注意:由于本篇文章中所涉及的时态比较多,所以要注意一下时态的变化。学生们都在表演什么节目可以用现在进行时,将要去做什么,要用将来时。另外还要注意,一般现在时在肯定句中,主语是第三人称单数,谓语动词也要用第三人称单数。