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一My views on Online Shopping

1. 现在网购已经成为一种时尚

2. 网上购物有很多好处,但也有不少问题

3. 我的建议

Nowadays, can we find a person who has not experienced online shopping? Definitely not. Online shopping is coming into fashion in most of cities due to the rapid development of internet technology.

Online shopping is welcomed by most people due to various reasons. From the perspective of consumer, it can save some time for people who don’t have much spare time. Just click the mouse, they can get whatever they want while staying at home. For the retailers, it can cut some costs for those who don’t have much circulating funds. They don’t have to rent a house and spend money on employees comparing with the traditional trade mode. However, there are still some defects in online shopping. First, face to face deal makes online shopping less reliable and trustworthy. Second, people will lose the fun of bargain.

It is undeniable that shopping on the internet has become an irresistible trend in modern society. It’s of great urgen cy that we need to regulate the relative laws in accordance with the rapid growth of online shopping. Only in this way can we enjoy the pleasure and convenience of online shopping without the concern of being treated.

点评:本次四级作文探讨的是最近的热点话题之一——互联网网购。目前网购的风靡程度是众所周知,因此,考生对于该话题还是比较熟悉的。但是,比较特殊的是,题干所列出的要求的是考生从一个客观的角度来阐述该话题,而不是简单陈述自己的意见。所以,考生应当审清楚题,在写作时不仅仅要列出网购的优点,还必须给出相应的缺点。 按照四级作文的要求,考生在第一段时应该总述现象并引出话题;



二On Excessive Packaging[过度包装]

Wandering at the supermarkets, you could find that the shelves are filled with fancy and excessively-packaged goods with high price, especially when festivals approach. Although the

government has much concerns over this issue, the phenomena are still common.

The reasons can be listed as follows. First, manufacturers could benefit from the over-packaging. Fancy packaging would increase the price to a large extent, from which they can earn more money. Secondly, some of the goods are brought and sent as gifts to our relatives and superiors. Gorgeously packaged gifts would be more attractive and add “face” to the on e who buys and sends them.

From my point of view, excessive packaging is a waste of resources and money. Most people would throw the package away after they open it, which would lay heavier burden to our environment. To prevent this, every citizen should be aware of the problem, and strict laws must be made or reinforced to restrict the manufactures from excessive packaging.

【解析】本次写作延续了传统的出题方式,即英文题目+ 中文解析,但同时也继续了去年的一点小改动,对字数作了明确的限定。对于考生而言,商品过度包装本身已是日常生活的热点话题,大家比较熟悉,能有较多发挥空间。



最后,用词方面,文章对“过度包装”使用了多种表达方式,如fancy packaging, luxurious packaging, glorious packaging等等。这样文章便不会显得“干燥”,让阅卷老师怀疑你的词汇量。因此,同学们在平时一定要注意同义词、词组的替换和使用。

三Education Pays

The above bar chart clearly shows us education pays in 2010. We see that unemployment rate of those with higher education background is much lower than those with lower education degree. For instance, the unemployment rate of college students with no degree is as high as 14.9% while that of those with doctoral degree is only 1.9%.

The following reason, in my opinion, is the most important one to account for this phenomenon. Compared with those with comparatively lower education degree, people who have received higher education possess considerably wider knowledge, more remarkable learning and research ability, greater innovation and most of all, resourceful social network, all of which make them more qualified and competent for their task. Thus, they are less likely to lose their jobs.

This phenomenon tells us that education is a worthy investment. Therefore, education investment should be strengthened while we, as college students, should study harder to avoid unemployment.

四The Big is the Little

Nothing can be done except little by little, the French poet Baudelaire Charles once said. Most people, however, often ignore such a truth. So does the little boy shown in the picture. He expresses his worries to his father about disposing of nuclear waste, but is told that he can achieve nothing if he doesn’t empty the dustbin first.

Every single little thing you can do today matters. The truth has been tested for ages, and thousands of great people have set good examples for us. For instance, Leonardo da Vinci, the world-renowned master in painting, starts his career with repeated egg-drawing. Lu Xun, the great man of letters, reminded himself to get up early by inscribing the character “morning” on his desk.

As university students, in my opinion, we should aim high, but at the same time, we shall never measure a task by its size. All in all, only those who have the patience to do simple things perfectly will acquire the skill to do difficult things easily.





五The Overusing of Cell Phones[过度依赖手机]

This picture portrays such an ironic situation: on the road, stands a man, who is completely concentrating on his cell phone whereas using a stick for direction, which implies the unprecedented popularity or even overusing of cell phones nowadays.

Exaggerated as the picture is , the phenomenon behind it is rather thought-procking. With the development of high-tech equipment, especially smart phones, people in growing numbers tend to become addicted to the excessive use of them. According to a survey carried out in China Daily several days ago, almost 47% of citizens explain that they would experience certain kind of anxiety without cellphones at hand. Meanwhile, the overusing of cellphones, firstly, would exert detrimental impact on the health of us. What’s worse, it would perform a negative character in interpersonal relationship since we have less time to communicate.

Judging from the evidence above, certain measures should be taken. Firstly, certain institutions in

China should launch relevant campaigns to limit the excessive ust of cellphones. Moreover, we ,as college students, should put emphasis on it right from ourselves as a start.




最后你要做一个论述,说这门课对我产生的影响,以及未来我怎么对待它,这些都需要写。 作文题目二:“大学中影响你最深的一位同学”


要点:要把这位同学他影响你的事迹、经历,令你振奋的故事描述和记叙出来。特别像六级考试考的是举例论证。特别像六级考试当中的举例论证,可能考的又是这样的题目。比如说给你一个什么样的观点,Please set some examples to illustrate your point,请你举一些例子来证明你的观点,六级考试是举例的,考例子,要描述的。现在的四级没有说一定要举例子,但是以题目的方式隐性要求你必须写故事、写例子。

比如我们看一下今天公布的范文说影响最深的一位同学,我们对它的描述是有个同学,刚刚开学的时候我们没有什么印象,但是他后来经常迟到印象很深,后来了解是他是跟久病卧床的妈妈一起上学的,为了照顾久病的妈妈所以经常迟到,但是他为了不仅解决了生活和学业的负担,优秀毕业,获得了奖学金。这件事情给我的影响是我们要如何面对压力、我们要有坚持和毅力,包括强大的意志面对生活中的不幸和磨难,这位同学对我的影响是非常深刻的。所以你把这个故事写完以后做一些评论,说他对我的影响是什么。最后还可以说一下我们以后要选择什么样的朋友,这位朋友给了我很深刻的影响,他给我的启发是以后我们要选择真正对我们有影响,有帮助,给我们正能量的朋友。第二段进行描述、记叙,第三段议论。 作文题目三:《A campus activity that has benefited most》——一项对你影响最深刻的校园活动。








六The Most Impressing Course in My College Life


During the two years of college life, I have attended many special courses, among which the most impressed one is psychology. I still remembered the days when I was fed up with my major Math, which frustrated me so much. Till I fortunately select one of the most fascinating optional courses lectured by Professor Wang.

Time gone back to the first class of Mr. Wang, I found a little old man came in the classroom with a thick book of psychology. Mysteriously, I first unveiled and explored the myth within it by the vivid demonstration of Mr. Wang, and became fascinated with this course. In the following days, it enclosed an assorted of psychological phenomenon reflected in ordinary people’s daily lives by illustrating examples in reality.

To be frank, it is the psychology class that enlightens my soul of exploring the unknown world and stimulate my desire to learn. And it is no surprise to say that psychology is the most impressing course for me in college.

七The Most Impressive Campus Activity

Every university offers numerous kinds of activities to enrich students’ extracurricular life. As one of the young college students, I have benefited a lot from all of these well-organized activities, but the one impressing me most is the debate competition which I took part in last year.

That was a debate competition between different majors and the topic was about theoretical knowledge versus practices. What mattered most is not the result of the debate, but gathering background information and practicing the process of debate. Also, no individual could accomplish the challenging task all by herself or himself, so joint efforts have played a significant role in winning the competition. Team spirit and co-operation has been improved a lot and I believe this is more precious than winning or losing.

To be brief, we should participate in more campus activities, not only can we get a better understanding of what we have learnt before, but also make new friends and discover our interests.







八How Should Parents Help Children to be Independent

Nowadays, there is a growing concern over such a phenomenon, that is, some parents take care of almost everything concerned with their children, including study, work and marriage. Some parents believe that this is love, however, it is only to destroy chil dren’s independence thoroughly.

For the future of the next generation, more efforts should be made by parents to help their children to be independent. The fundamental one is to cultivate the awareness, namely, the importance and necessity of being independent, which is supposed to begin from childhood. Children should be taught that no one can be stronger and more helpful than themselves in this world.

The quality of independence is so indispensable for us that parents had better act as a tutor, not a dictator. And only with parents' trust, can the next generation accumulate confidence step by step.

今年的作文主题非常贴近考生的生活,给了考生很大的发挥空间,擅长写日常生活细节的学生可以写上三五个句子勾勒父母对于子女的过度关爱,而擅长逻辑思考的学生则可以更多地阐述父母怎样的行为才可以培养子女独立的品格,而过度宠爱正导致了独立精神的消失。 从具体操作的角度来说,对于基础较为薄弱的考生,这次的考试题目是比较容易套用模板的,



In recent days, we have to face a problem-----A, which is becoming more and more serious. ----(说明A 的现状) .

Confronted with A, we should take a series of effective measures to cope with the situation. For one thing, ---------------(解决方法一). For another -------------(解决方法二). Finally, --------------(解决方法三).

Personally, I believe that -------------(我的解决方法). Consequently, I’m confident that a bright future is awaiting us because --------------(带来的好处).


但是对于能够用流畅的英语表达自己的思路的同学来说,写作如果希望取得比较高的分数,则需要注意语言必须尽可能简洁才能够在规定字数以内说清楚自己的论点,而句子的表达要求,也从有话可说,上升到言之有理,甚至上升到语言精致优美,内在逻辑严密的高度了。 在我们给出大家的这篇范文里面,三段文字结构清晰,语言简明优美又没有落入模板的窠臼,属于在临场作文中的优秀之作。