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A

How time flies! Last year, I was still nervous about the exams, however, I’ve become fearless now. What will life be like this time next year?

Perhaps I’ll study in my favorite high school. My grades may improve a lot. I hope to have the courage to face the challenges through life. It ’ll be delightful to be more confident and competent. It must be a hectic time. To achieve the above things next year, I still have a long way to go. I should study hard from now on because “Rome was not built in a day ”. With the perseverance, step by step, I believe I’ll finally make a difference.

本文行文流畅,语言准确,虽然内容没有什么新意,但是开头用去年、今年的对比引出明年可能发生的变化,并且可以熟练的运用多个复杂句式,词汇的运用也比较贴切。比起很多谚语俗语的滥用,此处的引用算是比较恰当的。总体来说是值得鼓励的表达。

B

Although I don’t know what will happen next year, I hope to be a senior high student. I think I will continue studying. Perhaps I will need to make pocket money by myself next year. It will be exciting for me to take care of myself. I will wash my own clothes and clean my room myself. Without my mother’s help, I will also live as well as before. Everything sounds great. I hope this time next year will come soon.

本文的主题还是比较明确的,能够围绕“明年此时希望能够进入高中并且更加自立”这一主题展开叙述,虽然内容不算有新意,表达的也稍嫌单薄,但还是比较符合这个年龄阶段考生的认知状况和实际生活的,虽然没有特别令人眼前一亮的表达,但是大体上看得出基础知识的掌握还比较牢固,可以得到1-2分的组织结构分。

C

In my opinion, I will have a lot of changes this time next year. I hope that I can join my dream school. It will be exciting for me to learn more knowledge from new school. On that time, my age is 17. I will become a adult soon. So I will be responble for my life and everything. Let’s looking forward to waiting for the next year.

考生可能试图想表达“明年的生活将会发生许多变化”的主题,因此围绕这一主题,就自己的未来生活进行了一些想象,遗憾的是展现出来的内容比较松散,对于主题表达不够清楚达意,也有一些语言错误。