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题目:

Directions: Some people maintain that universities are the best place for young people to receive higher education; other people believe that young people can be equally educated by taking correspondence courses or going to evening classes and open universities in their spare time。 Write an article of about 300 words in which you compare and

contrast the advantages and disadvantages of formal university education and informal higher education. Which do you think is more effective and desirable? Support your argument with appropriate examples or illustrations 。

命题思路:

本试题要求学生对比高等教育的两种主要形式:正规的大学课堂教育与函授、夜大学、电视大学等业余的非正规高等教育。学生必须在对比权衡两种不同模式的利弊后,阐述自己的观点,并有适当的例证。

就题目所涉及的内容而言,考生比较熟悉,因为高等教育是与他们最贴近的现实。这样可以在一定程度上保证本次写作考试的信度,

确保学生不至于因为思路障碍,无话可说而影响英语写作。从组织结构而言,本试题是典型的”对比型”作文,能够比较有效地考察学生的逻辑思维能力、观点表达能力以及运用适当的语言形式来实现转折、衔接、连贯等语言能力。评分细则:

本题作文的评分可参照如下标准:

1. 内容:(30%)

主要观测点:

■内容是否充实、完整;是否有一定的支撑细节;

■观点是否鲜明;

■论证是否有力;

■逻辑是否合理;

2. 组织结构:(20%)

主要观测点:

■总体结构是否合理;

■能否确定有意义的比照点,逐点分层次阐述;

■能否分段落陈述,各段落有合适的主题句(Topic Sentence)和辅助句(Supporting Sentences);

■段落之间是否连贯;

3. 语言表达:(50%)主要观测点:

■用词是否贴切;

■句子结构是否符合语法;

■能否运用不同的语言形式,灵活表达;

■能否运用对比、递进、转折等语言衔接手段,实现文章的连贯; ■语言是否得体,语气是否得当。

Informal Higher Education Serves Better

姓名 黄沁 江苏省南京市南京师大附中 学校 高二(13)班级 准考证号 0413

Although most students are still fighting for the diploma in

universities after graduation from high school, it has been a clear trend that more and more students choose to start their working career earlier and receive informal higher education, which in my opinion, serves better to build more competition (competitive) and suitable personal abilities。 Informal higher education offers better opportunities to adapt to

social life for students, and help them understand better the reality of their social community and responsibilities they are to take. Compared with those who spend entirely their time in the (on) campus, students who take evening classes could contact with more people, develop their

communication skills and social behaviors during working hours. They

know better how cruel and realistic the society is and that it is your power and capabilities that only speak. They understand and adapt better to the pressure of life’s difficulties which in universities could hardly be realized 。

Secondly, after experiencing real working life, these (those) who attend correspondence courses would know better what kind of

knowledge and abilities they must master, which definitely help them in future advancement and career choices. Suppose you’re a graduate from high school and become an assist of a car repairing workshop. Then you’ll have to know how the engine and different parts of the car works and how to deal with various crisises (emergent problems). Therefore, night schools’ education (evening classes) would enable you (插入 to) acquire more specialized knowledge which are fit to you. However, in universities, you have to learn a great many courses, some of which are comparatively useless and can even make you bewilded of future (bewildered to the future)。

Furthermore, as they have more time to manage for themselves,

students drop higher education in universities could earn some money and gain earlier start in career. These will ease their families’ burdens and satisfy their desire for basic money needs. As a matter of fact, nowadays, more than a few American teens abandon university’ s education and try to become a worker like air-conditional repairer (air-conditioner

repairman) who can earn as much as $ 30, 000 for the first year. Thus, their decisions benefit themselves and their families。

Conclude (To conclude) from all the facts talked above, we can safely arrive at the summary that informal higher education is more

efficient and serves better. It make (makes) you ahead of others in career development with more competitive skills, fit knowledge, pre cious experiences of social life and more leisure to earn some essential financial supports. As we’ll one day indulge ourselves in the real soci (walk into the realistic society,) informal higher education serves better for our present and future developing. (development)

Fruit & the Vitamin Medicine

姓名 俞艾杉 辽宁省大连市第二十四中 学校 2·10班级 准考证号 0335

With the world developing in (at) high speed, more and more young people take part in higher educated (education). Some of the (them) choose to go to universities, and the others joined evening classes and open universities or took correspondence courses. I think, if we put the formal university education as the fruits we eat and the informal higher

education would be like the vitamin medicine. Both of them could give us what we need。

Let’s see two examples: The first one is my elder sister, who studyed (studied) very well and went into Beijing University with a high mark. Now, after the four-year university life, she was employed by a lawyer firm and makes a large sum of money every year。

Another example is a girl who used to working in (work in) my father’s bar. She was a country girl, (插入 and) she worked hard but got little money, so under my father’s encouragement, she attended an

evening class in spare time. The first two years was a hard time, because on one hand, she must to (去掉) learn knowledge in the evening when she was very tired after one day's work; On the other hand, she had to make money to pay for the evening class. But then her way was wider and wider, and now she found a better job in a small company and can offer much more money to her poor family。

In my opinion, even both the girl and my sister got a good job at last, but I still think that enter (attending) formal university is better. Because in universities we could make more friends, we could get more chances to communicate with the experienceness (experienced) professors, we could get more ways to receive information of our future jobs, and we could also send ourselves into the coulful (colorful) groups in the university so

that we could have a happier higher educated life. But in the informal education, there could not be so much fun。

Though I thought like this, but I have to say equally that both fruit and vitamin medicine can give us the vitamins we need, the only

difference between them is that some people love fruits and the others may thought (think) having medicine is easier. So whatever you choose, the fruit or the medicine (the formal university education or the informal higher education), the most important is that you can get the knowledge you wanted, isn't it?

Let's Go to Universities!

姓名 张培培 山东省淄博市第十一中 学校 高二22班级 准考证号 0209

There's a general debate (插入 on) whether or not universities are the best place for young people to receive higher education. Some people th ink it right while others think the opposite is true. There’s probably some truth in both opinions。

Some students dream to go (dream of going) to universities be- cause studying in universities does do good to them. Universities have super (outstanding) teachers and professors and most universities are equipped with excellent facilities. Also, by taking part in all kinds of activities organized in universities, students can widen their views (插入

and) increase their experience. In this case, many students are motivated to study harder and acquire more knowledge in middle schools in order to be admitted by the universities they dream of. Not only (插入 do)

universities provide good studying place (circumstance), but also they (去掉) encourage students to study. However, there are also some disadvantages. For instance, some universities are not so good as

expected, (插入 and) many students can’t learn much to meet the need of society. Those who fail in their exams can’t go to their desirable universities 。

However, the opportunity is offered by the open universities. Students can be equally educated by taking correspondence courses or going to evening class if they fail to go to universities. They can choose courses that cater for their interest and the need of the times freely.

Although they are refused to go to universities, they can also benefit from the correspondence courses or evening classes. As the saying goes, “every coin has two sides”. Things always leave undesiabl (something undesirable). There are some evening classes whoes (whose) quality is not good. It’s hard for people to receive sufficient knowledge。

For me, as a student, I would like to go to universities. Once a time, I walked in the Peking University. I was really attracted by the

swaggering confidence, the irrepressible spirit and the indomitable nerves that the students in it (去掉) have. I was lost in the studying atmosphere.

I’m really eager to go to university that I like. It is the goal that motivates me to study hard. I have done my best and will continue to do so. I believe it won’t be long before I achieve my goal!

Ibsen once said, “It’ a your suprem (supreme) duty to cast yourself into a useful emplement。” (implement) I set my mind to go to the university and I’m determined to succeed。

Let’s go to universities for the universities’ advantages provided。 Stop Your Superstition On Universities

姓名 张益 中河北省石家庄市石家庄外国语 学校 高一(10)班班级 准考证号 0208

Last decade saw the flood peak of students streaming into formal, venerable universities. It seems as if university is the only cradle for(插入 its) talented professers (professors) and well-known celebribties

(celebrities). However, I myself never believe the theory holds water. On the contrary, I recommend correspondence courses as well as open universities to be the more preferable choices for modem teenagers。 Surely, formal universities enjoy a much better reputation throughout the society, which may more or less be helpful for their students to get a well-paid job. But don’t be deceived by the attracting illusion. University might be a good place to obtain knowledge, but

knowledge seems to be too narrow in front of the definition of education. Not only those language point from the book, but also the specific skills on how to communicate with people, are what we need to become

successful. But take a glance at the way students get “educated” in formal universities. They get up at an approximately same time, (插入 and) they go to assigned classroom and start facing dull books all day. They just have no time to get more sociable skills as well as definite, professional tecneques (techniques). That’s why oceans of university graduations are obliged to major some more practical skills again, for they are mostly jobless 。

However, attending correspondence courses or evening classes, is a perfect way to solve the problem. We can make full use of our spare time to do a part-time job and to get more “education” naturally from the vivid society. To say “I obtain knowledge, and I get the true essence of how to become a real marl. “ is not enough to de- scribe its efficiency and magic. We can undoubtedly renew our antiquated, inadequate “knowledge case” inside our brain by diligently study (studying) at night, and

conscientiously taking a job and get- ring “extra-education” at daytime。 Stop your superstition on universities, and make a more effective choice without hesitation. Only in this way can a perfect celerity both well-educated and sociable be shaped!

Universities or Informal Education?

姓名 刘钥铭 辽宁省本溪市高级中学 学校 高二十五班班级 准考证号 0125

It is an undeniable fact that, nowadays, a controversial debate has (插入 been) risen as to whether universities or informal higher education is more essential for students, (which is more essential for students, universities or informal higher education). People vary in their opinions on this question。

Those who are in favor of universities often provide the following evidence. First of all, universities are run by the government and seem to be more reliable, whereas informal higher education is short of serious disciplines. Moreover universities have the incomparable merits that with students living in their dormitories they provide (are provided) plenty of time to gain the knowledge they long for。

Nevertheless, there are also people who set forth a totally opposite idea. They claim that there are various kinds of informal education ranging from correspondence courses to open universities and evening classes, from which students can choose freely according to their own needs and likes. Furthermore, students can get more spare time to step

into other activities or continue their work during the daytime. While in universities, students have to stay inside all day. This, of course, will reject those workers who have an appetite for knowledge and want to further their study。

From my perspective, I think the former group’s idea is more favorable. Three key components account for my choice. First and

foremost, with a longer history, universities provide students with more accurate knowledge and can equip them better for their future career. What’s more, during the four years of acdamic (academic) life, students can broaden their eyes, deepen their understanding, sharpen their mind and maintain specialized training. Last but not least, it is commonly accepted that universities are more experienced in education and have a better environment for students to develop themselves both mentally and physically 。

Taking all these factors into consideration, I confidentally

(confidently) come to the conclusion that one should give priority to universifies. Only in this way can they arm themselves with more knowledge and perfect their personalities。

University, a Better Choice

姓名 卢亦岑 辽宁省沈阳市东北育才 学校 高一9班级 准考证号 0083

Today, more and more students choose to go to universities after their (they) graduate from high school. The motive varies from individual to individual. Meanwhile, there are also a number of people argue that for juveniles, taking correspondence courses or going to evening classes and open universities in their spare time would be a better choice, since these students, who are new-comers of the society, can learn much more

outside the classroom. To determine which is more desirable, we should look into further details。

It is a simple yet universial (universal) law that for adolescents, study is a never-changed thing to do. Consequently, students may never take the pain to ponder: why I go to school? (插入 When) answering the question why they go to universities, they may say, “to learn more

academic knowledges (knowledge), to made new friends, to look for a higher-paid (well-paid) job and so on。” Universities, nevertheless, have the ability to offer young peoples (people) who are of an age a large platform, which let them to meet, to compete, and to learn from each other. The impact that universities have had on our society in general, is undeniable. Lots of people when reminded (recalling) of the old days in university, would say, that four years are golden, since (for) it provided them lots of opportunities. Though painstaking and time-consuming in many people’s eye, the function that university as a refinery of the young is highly valued and of essence。

On the contrary, evening classes and so on so force (去掉) , would stand in a lower position for its lack of communications. Say, students come from a single (the same) city, not even a country. Unlike the exotic faces in a university campus (去掉) , students of a (an) evening class are not at all diversified. In addition, it is no doubt that in a broad sense, no one can garantee (guarantee) that those student (students) will be under a condition of “learning” during the free time of a part time (part-time) class. Will all of them, our future elites, go to work or read books in

libraries? Hardly. Gone are the days when knowledge is highly valued. It is a time now, when technology is accumulated by multiplying, and at the same time becomes more and more entertaining. Internet, TV, ... all kinds of things will lead to a consequence that students’ concentration be

distracted. As a result, the detriments of evening class will overweigh its benifits (benefits)。

When the issue comes to my current situation, I will definetly (definitely) choose go to universities without any hesitate (hesitation). However, part-time classes would be a better choice under only one

circumstance. It only benefits people who have high self-control, who are virtually minority in quantity。

姓名 耿侠英 山西省太原市外国语 学校 高601班级 准考证号0382

There was a time when people believed in the simple truth that one couldn’t have a bright future without a university-education degree. Have you ever been deeply convinced about this opinion? Have you ever tried to prove it? Is it true that the informal education is a kind of the worst choice?

There is no doubt that being admitted to a key university is a good way to success. Being in our ideal universities, we can enjoy the various kinds of school lives and find (discover) ourselves while working in

students’ communities. With joyness (joys) and happiness, we grow more mature and knowledgeable and get a harvest of precious experience. We let out all our intelligience (intelligence) in university and make friends with each other. What’s more, we receive a high level of education which is given by qualified and experienced professors. In a word, we make big improvements during the colorful and fruitful school lives. But at the same time, the formal university educations may lead to the unfairness between the general students. A great many students are forced to give up the chance to go to university for the lack of money. Considering this, we may ask ourselves ff it is the only way for every one to catch their dreams 。

With the development of the education, there exists (exist) many informal higher education schools like evening classes and open

universities. We must notice that these social schools have indeed helped

many students solve their problems in education. A part of people could take lessons (receive education) and go on working at the same time. For some people, it is another way to fulfill their broken (unfulfillable) dreams of universities. According to the basic condition of China, the informal education really does a good job a- bout the necessity of so many people’s education, and help to improve the quality of people in general. Besides this, people can experience a different concept of

education if ones have (one has) already got bored with their majors and want to learn more。

In my opinion, it is alright for everyone to do what they love to, to be what they love to be, for we are different from each other. We all have our own goals and dreams. Everyone is fair (equal) and every one has the right to realize their dreams. The most important thing is that we want to study, we want to make progress and we want to be someone. Although there are so many praises and abuses about our choices, we should stick on (to) our ideas just for the simple reason that we’ll make it only if we keep on studying. Believe me and believe in this idea: no one can stop you except yourself, (插入 and) your choice can be right just because you believe it is right, after all, impossible is nothing!

姓名 吕 图 辽宁省大连市育明高中 学校 三·九班级 准考证号 0139

Dear Jean:

It is a great surprise that you sent me a letter telling me that you were considering about getting higher education! Now that you can

hardly decide whether to go to formal universities or informal courses, let me give you some advice that may help。

The formal or the informal, there is much discussion nowadays on it (both). Most people incline to the former for the most important reason: it is formal. The word “formal” means famous professors, latest

information, better facilities and more opportunities, few of which the informal colleges can provide with (去掉). However, there are some things that formal universities can not offer: a flexible timetable and a study plan just for you. The reason why Bill Gates left Harvard before graduation lies in the fact that he couldn’t gain what he himself wanted to learn 。

On the other hand, some people hold the view that young people can be equally educated by taking informal courses in their spare time. The reasons are as follow. First and foremost, informal courses give people more chances to learn if they failed to attend a formal university.

Furthermore, the timetable is so flexible that you don’t have to quit from

your job. Last but not least, the open attitude of informal courses

encourages more people to pick up books again when they are no more young (not young), as the saying goes “Live to learn, learn till death. “ Notwithstanding the advantages, there are still some advantages

(disadvantages). For instance, many companies don’t hire a man who has just been in informal universities instead of a formal one。

As far as I’m concerned, I tend to a formal university and I’ve just told you the reasons above. But there is one thing that I believe all my life: the fit one is the best. Please don’t just follow my advice, on the contrary you should think carefully and make you own decision. The future being in your own hand, just ask yourself: what you truly desire for。 Well, please send me a letter after you make up your mind. No matter what the decision is, I am proud of you! Good Luck!

Your sincerely, Ann 姓名 陈 茜 辽宁省大连市第24高中 学校 高二·一班级 准考证号 0300

With different kinds of evening classes and open universities

popping up everywhere, there is no denying that complementary schools have played an integral part in our lives. However, my perspective is that formal universities far outweigh such complementary schools。

Allowing for more flexibility, students (Complementary schools allow more flexibility, and the students there) can adjust their study schedule to match the time of day when they are most alert (busy). Nevertheless, there also exist some disadvantages that should never be ignored. Firstly, such schools don’t have severe disciplines, thus some students are easily lured to the dreadful sin instead of the heaven for knowledge (逻辑错误, acquiring knowledge). Gang violence can be seen in such schools. Secondly, some students there just want to kill time and attach too much importance on (to) fashion. As a result, poor students would be ostracized for their shabby clothing, while middle class students would feel much pressure to spend exorbitant amounts on expensive designer clothing. Thirdly, some open schools are like marshmallows, light and fluffy with no real sub- stance. It’s a waste of time and money. Last but not least, all companies don’t view certifications (certificates) of such schools equivalent to those of formal schools. Job hunting could become a (an) insurmountable problem。

Conversely, there is a correlation between formal universities and the word “authority”. Firstly, universities provide an ideal environment for study with rules promoting discipline. Needless to say, it will stimulate students to discuss about thought-provoking issues and

exchange their own experiences. Secondly, formal universities can creat (create) a sense of cohesiveness, which leads students to work within a

group concept. It’s an all-important factor in the society. Thirdly, students can build successful human interaction in (on) campus since they have more time to spend together, finding they have more in common with one another. Life in universities is like food, be it nutritious food for our body or spiritual food for our soul。

There are several examples of some individuals who get success without university experience. However, there’re tens of thousands of examples who fail. Auending a formal university, as a general rule of thumb, is the best way to go。

The Garden of Eden for Students -I Choose University

姓名 刘 莞 天津市南开中学 学校 高二三班级 准考证号 0128

University, which is the Garden of Eden for students in the eyes of many people, is still doing the big job that is, making students useful to this world. Though Bill Gates can stand up to speak for his own,

everyone can’t deny the importance of university. Other people believe that the young can also be educated through other ways. Yes. All we want is knowledge. All we need to do is to improve ourselves. If so, why not devote your most precious and energetic years to this Garden of Eden, in time you will not regret your deed。

Now please let me defend for myself, why I place university on such a holy state better than anything else。

From the day the first university was found (Maybe Oxford), this world begins to define university as the right place where high (top)

students should go. First, the professors in university attract us. They just like the Socrates in ancient Greek. Everyone was eager to go where the study is famous. The better the courses are, the better students it produces, the more famous the university will be. Since SAT become prevalent in Chinese mainland, it has attracted many Chinese top students to try on the project. It opens a door for us to U. S. universities: Harvard, Yale, Stanford, etc。

Second, University shapes us into different roles we play in society in the future. If one has the talent in leading people, it probably begins to appear in University。

While University is perfect in many people’s eyes, it has been critizing (criticized) for a long time. Many complain that they don’t get use ful knowledge during the four years, it’s (It is) no better than four blank years except for balls, parties, and meeting different people. But I must say, whenever you have a goal, you will not lose yourself in

university, (插入for) it’s a land of peace, but a land of challenge (vanity fair) 。

On the other hand, the informal education becomes more and more useful. It furnishes a lot of people’s life, and its knowledge is

immediately practiced. I admit its importance, for I myself have seen many universities like this in England, Germany and many other

European. But to spot the stuff, university should not be ignored. It can not be placed (replaced). Because the informal education is just a way for getting knowledge, it’s nothing more, but instant knowledge。

To Sum up, I prefer the university to be more effective and desirable. It is indeed the case。