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高考英语书面表达书信和通知辅导

【题例一】 书面表达:(NMET1999)

假设你是李华,在一所中学读书。最近收到美国朋友Smith 先生的来信。他三年前参观过你校,

听说现在变化很大,希望了解有关情况。参照下图(图片无法显示,见《高考纠错本 英语》一书,下同),给他写一封回信,介绍你校的变化。

注意:1.回信须包括图画的主要内容,可以适当增减细节,使内容连贯。

2.词数100左右。

Dear Mr Smith,

I’m glad to receive your letter.①Yes,you’re right,in the past three years great changes happened in my school.

There ②is only one school building in my school three years ago,but now,there is another new building ③at the east of our school and a library ④at the weast ⑤where used to be my playground.The new playground is built ⑥ out of my school age.⑦So my school becomes larger than before.Also around my school there are lots of trees which are planted by ourselves.

⑧Now,my school becomes large and beautiful.I hope some day you can come to my school. ⑨We ’ll welcome you!

Best wishes,

Yours,

Li Hua

【误点及纠错】

1.短语句子不符习惯

【纠错】本文要点基本齐全, 但在表达中有些层次不清, 且有多处语法和用法不当的错误.

① 第二句话Yes, you’re right, in the past three years great changes happened in my school. 中, 有用词搭配错误,change 不能与happen 一起使用,happen 应改为take

place, 而且此处时态应该用完成时和时间状语in the past three years呼应。改后的句子为:Yes, you’re right, in the past three years great changes have taken place in my school.② 第二段第一句中is 应改为was. ③ at the east of our school 应改为 in the east of our school.④ at the weast应改为 in the west, weast 是拼写错误。⑥ age 是明显的拼写错误,应该是gate, 这种错误应尽量避免;out of my school gate 指的是大门外,不妥。把out of 改成in front of 或outside 较好。

⑧ Now, my school becomes large and beautiful这句话可改为:Now, my school become more and more beautiful.理由同⑦。⑨We’ll welcome you ! 应改为:You are welcome!

又如“题例二” ③ get to 是固定词组。⑤write down是固定词组,意为“记下”。⑥“在吃午饭时”,应用介词短语。⑧“to one’s joy”是固定词组,意为“令某人高兴的是。” ⑨another 意为“又一”。

又如“题例三” ①raise 相当于lift, 指把某物位置升高;improve 相当于become better, 意为“改进;提高”。⑤按英语习惯,表达“欢迎某人做某事”时,经常把welcome 用作形容词。

又如“题例四”⑦can’t常用来表示“能力;可能性”,此处最好用shouldn’t。

2.上下文缺乏逻辑

【纠错】⑤ where used to be my playground 中存在逻辑错误,应改为:where our old playground used to be .

3.结论不当

【纠错】⑦ So my school becomes larger than before 这个结论不太恰当,学校不会因为操场的迁出而变大,况且在原操场处又建了图书馆,这句话应去掉。 参考范文:

Dear Mr Smith,

I was so pleased to hear from you and am writing to tell you something about my school. You are right. Quite a few changes have taken place. On one side of the road there is a new classroom building. On the other side, where the playground used to be now stands another new building---our library. In it there are all kinds of books, newspapers and magazines. The playground is now in front of the school. We have

also planted a lot of trees in and around the school. I hope you come and see for yourself some day.

Best wishes,

Yours,

Li Hua

【题例二】书面表达:

用日记形式记一次有意义的旅行。

提示:1.时间:2000年4月16日,星期天;2.天气:晴;3.人员:你班全体人员;4.地点:森林(乘车两小时到达);5.活动内容:记录看到的动植物,野餐,检验河水,看看是否有污染。

要求:词数不少于100词。

习作:

Sunday, April 16,2000 Fine

This Sunday(Today①) our class organized a trip to a forest. We went by bus and it takes(took②)us two hours to get to③) the forest. When we arrived, we walked through the forest separately. While we were walking, we (we④) recorded all the wildlife and plants we could see in the forest (as we walked).When we found an unknown plant, we wrote (it down⑤) in our notebooks.

Lunch(At lunch⑥) time we made a fire in the open and cooked the meal over it. After lunch, we came to a river and tested the water to see if it was polluting(ed⑦).Late in the afternoon we returned. In(To our⑧) joy, we not only learned about some wildlife and plants, but also enjoyed ourselves very much. I hope I’ll have other(another⑨) chance to go out for a more interesting outing.

4.时间状语误用

【纠错】①日记记述的是当天发生的事情,故此处状语使用“Today”更准确。

5.时态误用

【纠错】②日记多用过去时,与上下文时态一致。

6.缺乏句子间的连接成分

【纠错】④此处用as 引导状语从句,意为“一边……一边”。

7.时态和语态误用

【纠错】⑦“检查河水是否受到污染”,从句中应用被动语态。

【题例三】书面表达:

英语学生会将举办英语演讲比赛,请用英语起草一份通知(notice ). 通知包括以下内容:

演讲时间:下周六下午三点

地点:201室

题目:自定,演讲时间不得超过10分钟。

报名办法:向班长报名(sign up)

评判及奖励:邀请五位教师任评委(judge ), 获前十名的参赛者(contestant )获奖

举办单位:学生会

写通知日期:2002年5月18日

习作:

Notice

May 18, 2002

In order to raise(improve①)the student’s ability to speak English, the Students’ Union of the English Department will hold an English contest in Room 201 on Saturday at 3 p.m. ② next week. Those who are willing to take part in it sign up with the monitors now. Every contestant can speak about the (any③)subject within ten minutes. Five teachers will be (invited to be④)judges. The first ten winners will be given awards as an encouragement. Welcome all(All) the students(are welcome⑤)to be present at the contest.

The Students’ Union

8.时间顺序不当

【纠错】②当句子有两个时间状语时应先说具体的,即先说小的,后说大的。

9.内容要点遗漏

【纠错】③根据提示,演讲者可自选任何一个主题。④句中应表示出“邀请”字样。 又如“题例四” ③ 本通知是在上语音课之前,科代表在教室里发表的,所以动词

应用go 。④there 本身即副词,不必用in 。

【题例四】书面表达:

假如你是英语科代表,在去语言实验室上听力课之前,向全班宣布注意事项: ①请提前5分钟来语言实验室;②换鞋进语言实验室;③除教材外不要带其他东西;④按老师指令做,不要随便动机器;⑤课堂上只许讲英语,不许讲汉语;⑥可以复制听力材料;⑦课后关机,按顺序离开实验室。

注意:

不要逐条翻译,以口头通知形式写一篇短文。字数:100字左右。

通知开头已给出:Hello, everyone. May I have your attention, please?

Hello, everyone. May I have your attention, please? I have something important to tell you. ①

When we have classes in the sound lab, please go (be②)there five minutes earlier. Change your shoes before you come(go③) into the lab. Don’t take anything into the lab except your textbooks, Once you’re in④ there, follow the teacher’s

instruction(s⑤).Don ’t touch the machines unless the teacher tells you(to⑥).In class you can only speak English. You can’t(shouldn’t⑦) speak Chinese. You can use the machines to make a copy of the⑧ listening material. When class is over, turn off your machine and leave the lab one by one.

That’s all. Thank you .(这是口头通知常用的结束语。⑨)

10.用词不当

【纠错】①文章开场白写得好,符合口头通知习惯用语,上下句衔接自然。②此处用be 或get ,语义表达才更确切。⑧此处不必要使用定冠词。

11.单复数不一致

【纠错】⑤instruction 在作“指示;说明;指令”解时,应使用复数形式。

【整合练习】

I). 下面6幅画描述了5月9日中午你和父母,姐姐在动物园一起午餐时所发生的 事情。根据这些图画用英语写一篇日记。

注意:1. 日记应包括图中要点,可以适当增加细节,使其连贯。

2. 词数:100个左右。

3. 日记的开头已写好,不计入总词数。

May 9, Sunday Fine

This morning my parents took my sister and me to the zoo…

生词:废物箱 litter-basket

II) .假如你是南京某中学学生李华。“十一”国庆节将至,你校外籍教师Alex 打算利用“十一”长假外出旅游,请根据下面的图例和中文提示用英语写一封信,为Alex 提供旅游建议。

日期活动安排

10月1日上午8:00从南京出发,下午游览天安门广场

10月2日登长城

10月3,4日游览颐和园;逛商场,购物

10月5日登泰山

10月6日早上看日出,下午返回

注意:1. 短文必须包括所有内容,要点,可适当增加细节,使其连贯,通顺。

2. 词数:100左右。

3. 信的开头已给出,但不计入总词数。

Dear Alex,

Here is my suggestion about your journey during the long National Day holidays… III). 假如你叫李明,你有一位英国网友名叫Tom ,他听说过中国的故宫,但知之不多,于是给你发来了email ,请你给他介绍一下有关故宫的一些情况。请你根据下面提供的一些要点给他回一封电子邮件:

1. 故宫(the Palace Museum)又叫紫禁城(the Forbidden City)。它于1407年开始修建,二十万人花了十四年的时间,于1420年建成。

2. 它所有的宫殿一共有999个房间。在中国“9”这个数字传统地被认为是吉祥的。

3. 现在,每周星期二,故宫免费向中国学生开发。

4. 故宫保存着中国历史上五千多年来的珍宝(precious treasures)。请他亲自来看一下。

IV). 假如你是李华,你的邻居张达去年七月毕业于安徽大学,现准备到南方找一家公司任职,而你的表哥恰好是南方一家公司的人事部负责人。现在请你用英语为他写一封推荐信。张达的个人资料如下表:

姓名张达性别男年龄23婚姻状况未婚

政治面貌党员

身体健康,身高1.82米

专业广告设计

特长绘画,打字,英语读写,汽车驾驶

性格特点少言语,细致,耐劳,有创新精神

爱好乒乓球

注意:词数100个左右。

V). 假如你是校学生会主席,根据学校的安排,由你给全校同学播送一条通知。内容如下:

1. 10月16日(星期六)下午2:30有一个实事报告

2. 报告人:英国剑桥大学Smith Milton教授

3. 报告内容:东西方不同建筑风格及其对艺术,文化的影响

4. 地点:学校礼堂

5. 要求:所有同学都要参加,准时到场,认真听讲,做好笔记。在听报告期间,如有问题询问,可举手或递纸条给报告人。报告会结束后将分班进行讨论 请根据以上内容写一则100词左右的英文广播通知。

参考答案:

1.May 9,Sunday Fine

This morning my parents took my sister and me to the zoo. At noon we had a picnic on the grass. I ate too much, so I couldn’t finish my sandwich. As I didn’t know what to do with it, I asked my sister for advice. She pointed at the notice, which said, “ No litter.” And she asked me to throw the sandwich into the litter-basket. Just then I saw

an elephant coming slowly towards us. Suddenly an idea came into my mind. I could feed the elephant with my sandwich and I did so in the end. Seeing this, my sister smiled and said, “How clever you are!”

2. Dear Alex,

Here is my suggestion about your journey during the long National Day holidays. On October 1,you may take the 8:00 flight to Beijing. You are to visit the Tian’an men Square in the afternoon. Next day, I suggest you visit the Great Wall, the longest wall in the world. For the next two days, you can go to the Summer Palace, walk around and do some shopping. On October 5,you are to take a train to Tai’an City to climb Mount Tai on the top of which, if lucky, you’ll have the chance to see the sunrise early in the morning. On the afternoon of October 6,you may return to Nanjing by train. I wish you could enjoy your travel.

Yours,

Li Hua

3. Dear Tom,

It is nice to receive your email. Now I’d like to tell you something about the Palace Museum.

Palace Museum is also called the Forbidden City. It took 200,000 workers more than 14 years to build it. The Forbidden City was finished in 1420.As the largest museum in the world, the Palace Museum holds cultural treasures from the past 5,000 years of Chinese history. The City’s palaces have 9,999 rooms altogether. Chinese people traditionally have thought of nine as a lucky number. Students from all over China can now visit it in groups free of charge every Tuesday. The museum is under reconstruction.

I hope you can come to China and take a look at this museum with your own eyes. Best wishes.

Yours,

Li Ming

4. Dear cousin,

I am writing to you to introduce my neighbour, who is also my friend, to you. His

name is Zhang Da, a Party member. He had studied advertisement design in Anhui University for four years, and in July last year he graduated from the university with good achievement in his study. I learned he wanted to find a job for himself in a company in the south, and I immediately thought of your company. Zhang is a tall young man of 23,and is unmarried. He is good at many things especially at drawing, typing and driving. He also speaks and writes English excellently and he plays table tennis well. He speaks little but he works hard and carefully with the spirit of making innovations. So I think you need such a person.

Best wishes.

Yours,

Li Hua

5. Boys and girls,

May I have your attention, please? Now I have an announcement to make. There will be a lecture in our school auditorium on Saturday Oct.16.It is about the different styles between eastern and western architecture and their effects on art and culture. The lecture will be given by Smith Milton, a professor from Cambridge University in England. It will begin at 2:30 p.m. Everyone is required to attend. Please listen

carefully and take notes. If somebody has a question, please put up your hand or write it down on a piece of paper and pass it to the speaker. After the lecture, we’ll have a discussion in each class.

Please do remember the time and place:2:30 p.m. Saturday Oct.16,school auditorium. Don’t be late.

That’s all. Thank you.

一.起始的过渡语

1. smoking should be banned in public areas.

2. you can write in English.

3. , doing exercise every day is of great importance in keeping fit. 4. agriculture needs to be developed quickly to feed the

world population.

二. 结尾常用过渡语

1. written English than in oral English.

2. taking morning exercises regularly may reduce the chances of getting sick.

3. , we should develop a good habit of study. 4.

三. 表示先后次序的过渡词语

1. 1 时间:

while, when, as 当…的时候 before 在…之前

soon after, after, after that, then 然后 just then 在…那时 as soon as 一…就 Early in the morning大清早

after a while 过了一会儿 This morning 今天早晨

the next moment 紧接着 The other day 几天前

a few minutes later 几分钟以后 Finally, In the end, at last 最后 soon , before long 不久

2递进:

first of all 首先

next 其次

besides 此外

3因果:

because so as a result thus 因而

therefore 因此,所以

4转折:

but

although, though

yet

however

otherwise, or 否则

in spite of , despite 不管

unexpectedly 没想到

instead of 而不是,反而

5比较

like 象 ,正如

unlike 不象,不同于

compared with 与相比

on the contrary 相反

on the other hand 在另一方面

6进一步说明

in other words 换句话说

namely 也就是

that is to say 也就是说

such as 比如

for example, for instance 例如

7总结

in a word 总之

in general 一般来说

in short 简而言之

after all 毕竟

generally speaking 概括地说

应用类

1. I want to ask two days’ leave because I need to be physically examined.

2. May I have your attention, please, everybody? I have an announcement to make.

3. I am writing to thank you for having given me so much help.

4. When I arrived at your home, you happened to be out, so I left the message.

5. I am writing to make an apology to you for what I have said about you and what I have done to you.

说明类(方向、坐落、指示)

1. My home is not far from here; it is only two blocks (away from here).

2. The bookstore is right on the left side of the street.

3. The museum is on the opposite side of the street.

4. There is a beautiful garden lying in the middle of the square.

5. There will be a strong wind to the north of the Huai River.

6. They live next door to us. They are our next-door neighbors.

7. Ireland is a large island in Europe.

8. Northern Ireland is part of the United Kingdom while the rest of the island makes up the Republic of Ireland.

9. The Ireland just west of Britain is called Ireland.

10. Between Britain and Ireland, in the Irish Sea, lies the small Isle of Man.

11. The British Isles are surrounded by the Atlantic Ocean to the west, and the North Sea to the east.

12. The largest island is called Britain, which is separated from France by the English Channel, which at one point is only 20 miles wide.

13. A new factory is to be located on this site.

14. The information office is located in the city center.

15. Behind it you will find a white building. That’s the library where you can find the very book.

16. The village is situated in a valley.

17. Where will the school be located?

18. This is a beautiful situation overlooking the valley.

19. That is the right direction of the site.

20. Go/walk straight until you find the traffic lights/reach a crossroads. Turn right, and you will find a bus

找工作/求职

1. I read your advertisement in yesterday’s newspaper.

2. I think I can be the right/suitable person you want. I want to be a volunteer.

3. I know from it that you have a vacancy for a typist/driver/secretary, etc.

4. I am sure I am suitable for the job.

5. Besides being good at typing, I have fluent/excellent spoken English.

6. I want very much to apply for the job you offer.

7. I am very interested in the job.

8. If I can get the job/can be employed, I will try my best to do it well.

9. I am looking forward to receiving your reply.

写信/邮件/回信

1. I am writing to tell you that we will have a get-together/ party next week.

2. I am writing to ask whether you have made a final decision to study abroad.

3. I am glad to receive your letter/e-mail saying that you are coming here next month. I am glad to know that you have been admitted to your dream university.

4. Remember me to your family. Good luck!

5. Expecting your writing back

图表变化类用语

1. As we can see from the chart, the number of people who use mobile phones is increasing steadily.

2. As can be seen from the table, there have been great changes in the ways of people getting information.

3. Compared to the year before last, it is obvious that the number has fallen sharply.

4. Great changes have taken place since 2000.

5. The number stays nearly the same, indicating that reading remains an important way that people acquire knowledge or find information.

6. More and more people turn to the Internet.

7. Nowadays, people have changed greatly in their eating habits.

8. It is no doubt it is the quickest and most convenient way to do things.

9. Living in the country, people can refresh themselves, breathing the fresh air.

10. By riding bicycles, people can produce, in a certain degree, no pollution to the environment.

11. More people are rich enough to afford such things as traveling.

12. Therefore, we can see it is a natural process with the development of science.

记人类

1. Hong Zhanhui, aged 23, a college student, is one of the top ten people who moved China in 2005.

2. He treated well/ took good care of his 11-year-old sister like a father.

3. He is highly praised for what he has done and what he is doing.

4. Poor as he is, he never gives up his studies.

5. Such is Hong Zhanhui, a poor but strong-minded and great person.

叙事类

1. The other day I was playing in the park when I met a foreigner, who was looking very worried.

2. He thanked me for having helped him out of trouble.

3. Seeing the case, I jumped off my bike and helped the driver, whose car was struck in the mud.

4. Through our joint efforts, we managed to do it/made it/succeeded in catching the thief.

5. The badly hurt boy was rushed to the nearest hospital.

6. It so happened that I was passing there.

7. Five minutes later, some firefighters with an ambulance arrived.

8. It was the boy’s bravery and cleverness that saved the people on the train.

日记类

1. It is Sunday today. This morning we had a social activity---visiting a car factory/ a farm/ a theme park.

2. From the activity we have learned a lot.

3. We benefited a lot from the activity.

4. We can realize that science is playing a more and more important part/role in modern agriculture and industry.

5. From it we must enhance our sense of duty to protect wildlife and our Mother Earth.

6. While visiting, we thought a lot.

7. What an unforgettable experience!

8. Never shall I forget the activity!

9. This is the lesson we should learn.

10. Though tired, we felt very happy.

讲道理类、观点对比类

21. In recent years, studying abroad has been popular.

22. There are several reasons for it.

23. I don’t think it is good for a child to begin learning a foreign language at a rather early age.

24. We have two main reasons why we are against it.

25. This should be done under others’ guidance/with others’ help.

26. To value time is to value life.

27. One of the reasons is that most of us cannot afford it.

28. It has some advantages as well as disadvantages.

29. Every coin has two sides.

30. As far as we know, it is of great benefit to our health and study.

31. We should arrange it scientifically.

32. Only in this way, can we solve the problem.

33. Recently we have had a heated discussion about whether we should have more time for out-of-class activity.

34. Opinions are divided into two parts.

35. They hold the view/opinion that students should take part in more social practice.

36. 30% of them are against/for the idea (that….)

37. They think it necessary to do so.

38. On the other hand/on the contrary/however, 65% of them insist that computer games be forbidden, even on weekends.

39. In conclusion, most people are in favor of the plan.

40. What is your opinion?

热点话题类

1. It is very important to live in harmony with one another/each other.

2. We must learn to get on well with others.

3. Noise pollution is more serious than before.

4. People should realize the serious situation.

5. The government should take immediate and necessary measures to deal with the problem.

6. In recent years costs in colleges and universities/hospitals tend to increase.

7. Though burdens/loads on farmers’ shoulders are reduced, yet most of them still have financial problem in sending their children to colleges or universities.

8. Costs should be reduced reasonably.

9. Students can have different ways to pay for their schooling.

10. They can win a scholarship through hard work.

11. Also, bank loan is another way.

12. Besides, they can take a suitable part-time job when necessary.

13. What’s more, our government can offer allowance to poor students for their life and study.

14. Planting trees is another effective way to prevent sand and sandstorms.

15. Take action before it is too late/we regret.

16. Something small may cause a big/great disaster.

17. We can learn to be independent.

18. We must do by ourselves what we can do.

19. If everyone had paid enough attention to the problem, we would not have been trapped in such a difficult position.