艺考生课程——作文第七十一讲
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教学过程

一、 课堂导入

通过上节的学习,我们可以看到字数福利时代到了,当字数不是问题的时候,现在的问题就在于如何让作文更有充分的说理。本节课我们学习的结构即是将说理更确切化,给同学们带来更大的福利性作文措施,感受结构的魅力。

二、复习预习

教师引导学生分析目前写作文中遇到的困境及试图的突围方案(提问、讨论),最后教师做一总结。 用where there is A, there is B结构写作文的最关键点在于?

第一,结构的完整性;

第二,词汇的选用和当AB 可能是代词的时候带来的陈述语序问题。

引导学生寻找解决方案。如学生无方案则引入本节话题:句型扩充福利

注意:本节讲解的所有内容依然还是建立在不讲述语法的情况下,故更多在讲解和训练中突出的就是无语法而写句子,但还需注意词汇的选用,难度适中,给学生带来新鲜的学习方式和学习效果。

三、知识讲解

知识点1:what 名词性从句用法

本节的第一个结构为what 名词性从句用法,如何使用及如何辨析则在于对于文章意思的把握。 1. A is to B what C is to D.

翻译:A 之于B 就像C 之于D.

(A/B∈名词、代词、Ving 等,而∉Ved/ because结构/句子)

如:Food is to people what water is to fish. 食物对于人就像水对于鱼。

Dream is to us what aim is to boat. 梦想对于我们就像目标对于船。

2. 【考查点】如果AC 为复数的话,则is 必须改成are 。 如:You are to us what boats are to travelers.

知识点2:名词性从句+非限定性定语从句的用法 上一节讲解的非限定性定语从句为:

I. 句子,from which we can see that+陈述句

II. 句子,because of which we can see that+陈述句

1. 【易错点】前提:必须是某句之后,不可单独成句。

如:

Where there is a will, there is a way, from which we can see that a strong will is a must for you. Where there is a place where people save water, there is safety, because of which we hold this party.

知识点3. it is high time that sb did something./ it is time that sb did something. 本句属于虚拟语气范畴,意思为:是某人该做„„时候了。

如:it is high time that we cleaned our classroom.

It is high time that we bought a bunch of flowers for her.

【易错点】注意:该句中that 从句一定是过去式。 如:

It is time that he came back.

It is time that we saved water.

It is time that we took measures.

知识点4:两个句式结合的写法

① Where there is A, there is a chance for us to do sth

②A is to B what C is to D ①,from which we can see that+陈述句

②,because of which we can see that+陈述句 V S

例1:(此处强调让学生看到速度和字数)

①Where there is a place where people do sth, there is B,from which we can see that A is to B what C is to D. Where there is a place where people help the old, happiness, from which we can see that helping the old is to

us what sunshine is to plants.

例2:

②Where there is a place where people do sth, there is B, because of which we can see that A is to B what C is to D.

Where there is a place where people do their a bit for our environment, there is healthy and happy life, from which we can see that doing a bit for our environment is to our life what water is to fish. So it is time that we

took measures to do the followings:

四、例题精析

【例题1】

翻译:有新鲜空气的地方,就有健康,由此我们可以看到新鲜空气对于我们就像水对于鱼。

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【答案】Where there is fresh air, there is health, from which we can see that fresh air is to us what water is to fish.

【解析】本题考察的是如何将新词使用到句子中的过程,以及如何将状语从句和名词性从句套装使用的内容。

【例题2】

翻译:Where there is a Bole, there is a chance for us to see real Qianli horse, because of which we can see that a good Bole is to us what aim is to boat. So it is high time that we found a good Bole.

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【答案】有伯乐的地方,就有机会让我们来看到千里马,因此我们可以看到一个好伯乐对于我们就像目标对于船。所以是我们该寻找一个好伯乐时候了。

【解析】本题考查对于本节结构的掌握和了解,一定注意it is high time结构的时态用法。

【例题3】

翻译:

有人们认真读书的地方,就有良好的行为,由此我们可以看到认真读书对于社会就像空气清新剂对于生活。所以是我们该建立一个图书馆的时候了。

【答案】Where there is a place where people read books carefully, there is good manners, from which we can see that reading books carefully is to our society what air freshener is to our life. So it is high time that we founded a library.

【解析】本题考查对本节句式的熟练掌握和单词的选择,并考察了“是该做„„时候了”这个虚拟语气句式的掌握,注意,该句式的谓语为过去式。

五、课堂运用

【基础】

1. 翻译:有中国人居住的地方,就有机会看到人们相互帮助,由此我们可以看到住在中国人社区对于一个外国人而言就像阳光对于植物。所以是你该加入我们团队的时候了。

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【答案】Where there is a place where Chinese live, there is a chance for people to see people help each other, from which we can see that living in a Chinese neighborhood is to a foreigner what sunshine is to plants. So it is time that you joined in us.

【解析】考查句式的掌握和词汇的选用,并注意,it is that句型一定是that 为过去式的状态。

2.翻译:

Where there is a place where people learn Chinese, there is a chance for us to enjoy the Ru culture, from which we can see that leaning Chinese is to you what building a bridge is to people. So it is high time that you joined in us.

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【答案】有人们学习汉语的地方,就有机会让我们来领略儒家文化,由此我们可以看到学习汉语对于你就像建造一个桥对于我们。所以是你该加入我们时候了。

【解析】考查对句式的理解和翻译,同时考察学生对于虚拟语气句式的认识和翻译。

3.翻译

①Cheating to students what stealing is to the thief。

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②和平饭店对于我们城市而言就像香格里拉酒店对于你们城市。

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【答案】

①作弊对于学生就像偷窃对于小偷。

②Heping restaurant is to our city what the Shangri-la Hotel is to our city.

【解析】题干中A 对于B 就像C 对于D ,中必须对应,不能选用对应不合理的名词或代词。

【巩固】

4. 翻译

有奋斗的地方就有机会让你看到成功,由此我们可以看到努力奋斗对于一个人就像发动机对于汽车。所以是我们该努力奋斗时候了。

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【答案】

Where there is struggle, there is a chance for us to see success, from which we can see that working hard is to us what engine is to a car. So it is time that we worked hard.

【解析】注意虚拟语气使用时候的时态问题。

5. 翻译:肉夹馍对于我们陕西而言就像汉堡对于你们,所以是你该尝一尝肉夹馍时候了。 ________________________________________________

【答案】Roujiamo is to our Shaanxi people what hamburger is to you, from which we can see that it is high time that you tasted Roujiamo.

【解析】注意it is high time that结构中的时态问题。

6. 翻译:有精彩的魔术表演的地方,就有机会看到他,因为精彩魔术表演对于他而言就像食物对于人,所以是我们该去魔术表演地方去找他的时候了。

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【答案】Where there is wonderful magic performance, there he is, for wonderful magic performance is to him what food is to a man, from which we can see that it is high time that we went to a place where there is wonderful magic performance to look for him.

【解析】本句中的主语为代词,代词在从句中是不倒装的,故注意此处的不倒装情况。

【拔高】

7. 假如你是李华,请根据以上报道给你在外地的朋友Tom 写信,介绍你校目前学生的健康状况以及学校为了防治红眼病所采取的一些具体措施,并表达你对他所在城市该病情的关注。

注意:不要逐句翻译,可适当增加细节以使行文连贯。词数150左右。

任务:请用本节的某个结构写出文中需要的关于地点状语从句、虚拟语气及名词性从句使用的表达。 _____________________________________________________________________________

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【答案】Where there is a place where people are aware of washing hands often, there is less chance for the disease to spread, from which we can see that washing hands as well as other good manners is to fighting against the disease what good medicine is to patients. (48 words)

【解析】说出勤洗手等事情的重要性是非常重要的环节,在类比的时候也可以专门列出,这样不但写出了文章的意思,也给结构的使用提供了很好的发挥空间,起到一箭双雕的效果。

8. 现在各个中学都开始组织学生参与社会实践活动,同学们对此有不同观点。请你根据以下信息给学校英语电台写一封稿件,并谈谈自己的看法。

要求:

1. 内容充实,结构完整,语义连贯。

2. 短文词数不少于100。

Social practice benefits students mainly in two aspects.

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【答案】Where there is a place where students take part in the social practice, there is a chance for them to improve themselves, from which we can see that taking part in the social practice is to students what rain is to plants. But every coin has two sides. Where there is a place where students spend too much time on taking part in the social practice, there is less time for them to study. So it is high time that they balance their study with their social practice. (88 words)

【解析】根据文章意思选择合适句式,文章中体现的就是参与或不参与的利与弊,故在选择句型的时候必须考虑文章的主题意思。

9. 世界园艺博览会(World Horticultural Exposition)将于2011年4月至10月在西安举行,世园会组委会现向社会招募志愿者,要求有意参加者用英文写一篇短文,文章要包含以下几个方面:

1. 你为什么要成为志愿者;

2. 你胜任志愿者工作的原因;

3. 为圆满完成志愿者工作你将作何准备?

I really hope to be a volunteer for the WHW. ____________________________

【答案】Where there is a place where a man knows the World Horticultural Exposition as well as being ready to help others, there is good atmosphere, from which we can see that I am to this job what water is to fish. So it is high time that you considered me.

【解析】根据文章意思选择合适句式,文章中体现的就是个人的优势和对于当志愿者的想法,故在选择句型的时候必须考虑文章的主题意思。

课程小结

本节课主要围绕关于what 名词性从句的用法及虚拟语气句式it is time that„„将文章的意思进行和最大限度的概括,并且将上节的地点状语从句进行了进一步的使用,直接让作文的字数达到的既定的要求,对于文章的意思表达和逻辑意义的传递达到了最大限度的支持,为学生形成一定的语言习惯以及进行进一步的详实写作打下了坚实的基础。

继续履行“不强调语法而进行语法写作”的学习特色,这是本节课一个非常重要的课题,也是教学中的一种创新和应用,故在教学中多进行互动性的训练,给学生提供更多实战性场景,尽情展现结构在作文中的妙用,给下一节课的参与注入最大的动力。

课后作业

【基础】

1. 翻译:Where there is a place where people try their best to finish the job, there is success, from which we can see that trying one’s best is to a man what a key is to a lock. So dear friends, it is time that we tried our best and never say die.

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【答案】有人们尽力完成任务的地方,就有成功,由此我们可以看到尽力做事对于一个人而言正如一把钥匙对于锁。所以朋友们,是我们该尽力做事时候了。

【解析】本题考查学生对于结构的掌握和应用,用学生对于词汇的感知及对于汉语的了解进行翻译,容易调动其参与热度。

【巩固】

2. 翻译:Where there is a place where a child makes mistake, there is a need for the parents to correct their ways of teaching children.

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【答案】子不教,父之过

【拔高】

3. 李华准备到外企求职,必须具备一定的英语水平。请发e-mail 告知他学英语的方法。

提示:

1 养成良好的学习习惯(如„. )

2多看英语电视和电影;扩大词汇量(enlarge your vocabulary);

3 要有自信;多讲,多用,不要怕出错。(have confidence in yourself)

请写出本节课中所学能够用到文章中的精彩句子。

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【答案】Where there is a place where you have confidence in yourself, there is a chance for you to speak out what you have learnt, from which we can see that it is time that you had confidence in yourself.

Where there is a place where people see more English movies, there is a chance for them to enlarge

their vocabulary, because of which I strongly suggest that you see more movies.

【解析】本题考查学生判断并寻找合适句子的能力,以原文的要求为出发点,寻找合适的句子和句式,同时结合汉语逻辑,这样就能写出符合文章需要的句子,并给文章增色。