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Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay on the topic of Online Shopping. You should write at least 120 words following the outline given below:

1. 现在网上购物已成为一种时尚

2. 网上购物有很多好处,但也有不少问题

3. 我的建议

Doing Shopping Online

With the development of the Internet, shopping is no longer a tiring thing. Just click your mouse to choose the articles you like, and the purchase is done. You don’t even have to step out of the room. It seems all easy and quick.

Howev er, people’s opinions vary on this trend. Some believe that on line shopping is time and money saving. With plentiful selection options, they can buy whatever they like at any time convenient. Still others insist that mis-purchasing alone is annoying enough, not to mention the credibility of the sellers and the safety of their accounts.

In my opinion, the convenience and excitement of on line shopping is beyond all doubts. In the meantime, we must always bear in mind that certain traps do exist, so we’d better make sure the sellers are trustworthy before buying. In addition, we should also guard ourselves from the potential hackers who might steal our account information.


这是一篇“中等偏上”的学生作文。 本文先对网购热潮进行简介,引出全篇;接着对网络购物的正反两方面进行对比;最后提出自己的看法结束全篇。整体看思路清晰,逻辑严密,行文流畅,用语较为地道。


1. 文章结构上,能看得出该同学试图采用议论文的“三段式”(提出问题、分析问题、解决问题)。 但是,以“With the development of the Internet”为开首语,有些落入俗套,有硬套模板的嫌疑。稍加注意,应该能写出更好的句子。

2. 微观语言点方面,有些语句稍显啰嗦,比如With plentiful selection options„ 简化成With plentiful selections„ 更好,意思没有丝毫减损,表达力反而增强许多;


With the help of the ever rapid development of internet technology, online shopping is coming into fashion in most of cities.

Online shopping is welcomed by most people due to various reasons. From the perspective of consumer, it can save some time for people who don’t have much spare time. Just click the mouse, they can get whatever they want while staying at home. For the retailers, it can cut some costs for those who don’t have much circulating funds. They don’t have to rent a house and spend money on

employees compared with the traditional trade mode. However, there are still some defects in online shopping. First, lace of face to face deal makes online shopping less reliable and trustworthy. Second, people will lose the fun of bargain.

It is undeniable that shopping on the internet has become an irresistible trend in modern society. It’s of great urgency that we need to regulate the relative laws accordance with the rapid growth of online shopping. Only in this way can we enjoy the pleasure and convenience of online shopping without the concern of being treated.



按照四级作文的要求,考生在第一段时应该总述现象并引出话题; 第二段考生应当从正反两方面来论述网购,分别铺陈其优缺点;关于优点,网购的优点很多,考生可择其最突出显著的方面来阐述,比如说网购可以节省很多时间;网购可以节省很多成本开支等;其次,缺点方面考生可以把重心放在诚信方面;为了不至于跟优点相比,缺点方面太轻,考生可以考虑稍微提一下其他缺点,比如说与传统购物




Online shopping has been a boon to many industries and companieslooking to expand their markets. Also, it ’s convenient for shoppers who are too busy to leave the house. However, in some cases nothing can replace a true face to face shopping experience.

Internet shopping is convenient for the mothers who spend all day doing house chores and for the fathers who work a full-time job. On the other hand, there are limits to shopping online, for example: guessing the correct size of clothing on a computer screen can be very frustrating. For the busy mother and father, online shopping is a very useful and convenient tool. But, there are instances, like clothes shopping, where nothing beats the real thing.








Directions: You're allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay entitled Nothing Succeeds Without a Strong Will by

commenting on the humorous saying, "Quitting smoking is the easiest thing in the world. I've done it hundreds of

time."You'd write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words. Outlines:

1. 坚强的意志是成功的重要保证。

2. 意志坚定的人才能完成伟大的使命

3. 学生也是这样,不刻苦学习,终究不会成为有用之才

There is an old saying: where there is a will, there is a way. It tells us that a strong will is the most essential quality that anyone who wants to achieve success. It can contribute a lot to one’s success.

Although “All roads lead to Rome”, none of them is completely smooth. Our life is filled with obstacles which may make us feel so hopeless that we may choose to give up. At the crucial moment, strong will helps a lot. As a matter of fact, the ability to work through difficult situation and unfortunate events with strong will can make one stronger and more capable. In other words, if we want to realize life’s goal, we must keep forging ahead with strong consciousness.

From what has been discussed above, we can see that the establishment of tough determination is of great importance to everyone. With a strong will, including our knowledge, we will be able to deal with any situation in our life. Whatever we do, as long as we stick to and do not give up easily, we will realize the goal at last.

四级写作体裁有三种:论说文、应用文及图表作文。论说文有三种:问题解决型、观点对比型和现象描述型。本次四级考试的作文题目为" Succeeds Without a Strong Will"属于论说文。

本文的整体内容可以分为三段,中心应该围绕“where there is a will, there is a way”,首段可以通过“戒烟很简单,但是不坚持,也是不能成功的”得出“万事都需要坚持”,从而确定整篇文章的中心论点。

第二段主要应聚焦于论证“意志坚定的人才能够完成伟大的使命”,可以通过以下几个句子,如"Life is not all roses";"Adversity is a good discipline."等句子来论证:坚定的意志是成功的必要阶段。此段为文章的主体段落,需要在保证文章通顺、逻辑清晰的基础上,注重语言的精彩,可以通过复合句的使用和排比的修辞方法来达到。




Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay on the topic of Certificate Craze. You should write at least 150 words following the outline given below:

1. 现在许多人热衷于各类证书考试

2. 其目的各不相同

3. 在我看来

The job market today is increasingly sophisticated, requiring workers to have specialized knowledge in their fields. As a result, becoming certified is a trend among today’s job seeking youth. More and more people, students especially, look at obtaining certification as a means to getting a better job and, therefore, enjoying brighter future.

There are as many certificates as there are fields of study. Lawyers will take the LSAT, business majors will take the GMAT to further their study in the US, and those who study a foreign language, like English, might take the TOEFL, TOEIC, or any number of English certification exams.

Is this necessary? Or, is the “certification craze” just a trend that will eventually pass? I myself have obtained two different certifications: one in Japanese (N2) and another in teaching English as a foreign language (TEFL). Both of these certifications have been beneficial in getting good jobs. Therefore, it is my opinion that, trend or not, the results of becoming certified are real and can be invaluable in opening up future opportunities.


1. 逻辑结构上,本文大体也是按照“提出问题(考证热的现象) ”“分析问题(背后的动力) ”和“解决问题(个人的观点) ”的结构展开。

2. 本文的亮点非常多,用语非常地道,用英语思维催动出来的英语文章,才是真正的极品。相比用中式思维催动出来的英语文章,这篇文章是很美味的,强烈建议大家背诵下来。大家记得《天龙八部》吗? 鸠摩智用小无相功催动出的招式是敌不过藏经阁里的扫地和尚的。总之,我们大可不必刻意使用难词难句,其实表意明确,用语地道的文章,就肯定可以拿到高分


Writing (30 minutes) Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay entitled The Way to Success by commenting on Abraham Lincoln's famous remark, "Give me six hours to chop down a tree, and I will spend, the first four sharpening the axe." You should write at least 150 words but no more than 200 words.

The Way to Success


The Way to Success Success is something everyone looks for, longs for and dies for. But have you ever considered what success is? Some may hold that success means one has beautiful life, like pretty house, cool cars and great power. It’s indeed one way to define success. But to me, success is doing something one really feels like doing.

To achieve this kind of success, one has to bear in mind three essential prerequisites, namely knowing where your interest really lies in, possessing the strong will to pursue your interest and having the diligence to realize your dream. In other words, they are ―what ‖ ―why ‖ and ―how ‖ of success. It’s really luckily good for one, especially for the younger generation of today to find their dreams, follow them and in the end, make them come true and become successful.

Although it’s never easy to succeed, progressing with the strong will and diligence towards the right direction, you’ll be the one!


这是一篇议论文。作者首先提出问题‖what is success? ‖, 但并没有在这个问题上着更多的笔墨,而是直接引出了自己的观点:success is doing something one really feels like doing. 算是立意较为新颖的地方。随后在第二段对这种成功背后的三种必要条件做出了阐述。整体看, 行文流畅,用语规范地道。 本篇亮点:

1. 排比词组或句子的运用: Success is something everyone looks for, longs for and dies for. „namely, knowing where your interest really lies in, possessing the strong will to pursue your interest and having the diligence to realize your dream.

2. bear in mind

3. lie in

4. strong will to pursue your interest


1. 文中人称有些混乱。有些使用第二人称代指读者,有些又以第三


2. 结构上,一般情况下我们建议考生使用典型的―三段式‖,即,





成功的本质。 整体看,文章在语言表达和立意上还不错。但在文章



The Way to Success First essay—stream of thought type The Way to

Success "Genius is one percent inspiration and ninety-nine percent

perspiration." And here comes our question, what is the way to success?

A strong will and great efforts are the most essential two keys to the

door of success. Why do people fail to achieve their goal? The reason is

that most of them give up halfway due to their lack of a strong will once

they encounter any difficulty. A man of a strong will always sticks to his

cause no matter how tough it might be.

Would Thomas Edison be such a great man in history if he had done

nothing but possessing a strong will? We are all familiar with his story

that he had tried one thousand kinds of materials before he finally made

his great bulb light up. Without hard effort, Edison might have been a nobody. Without efforts, no one can succeed.

To sum up, a strong will and great efforts can help one open up the way to success. Where there is a will with efforts, there is a way.


本次六级考试作文题为The way to success,与本次四级考试作文Nothing succeeds without a strong will遥相呼应,大同小异,都是在讨论成功这一话题。 此次六级考试作文的话题依然是老生常谈,即通往成功的道路,相信很多考生对此并不陌生,背过范文的同学写起来肯定也是得心应手。 该范文段落结构清晰,阐释说理也足以让人信服,是一篇不错的作文。






尾的力度,作者还对名言―Where there is a will, there is way‖进行了改编,换成了自己的观点,为我所用,这也是本篇范文的一个两点之处。注意,写作文时对名言进行恰当地改编,不仅能体现幽默创新的一面,同样也体现了作者不错的文字驾驭技巧,考官也是很欢迎这样的文章的。



1. 关于„„人们有不同的观点。一些人认为„„

There are different opinions among people as to ____ .Some people suggest that ____.

2. 俗话说„„,它是我们前辈的经历,但是,即使在今天,它在许多场合仍然适用。 There is an old saying______. It"s the experience of our forefather,however,it is correct in many cases even today.

3. 现在,„„,它们给我们的日常生活带来了许多危害。首先,„„;其次,„„。更为糟糕的是„„。

Today, ____, which have brought a lot of harms in our daily life. First, ____ Second,____. What makes things worse is that______.

4. 现在,„„很普遍,许多人喜欢„„,因为„„,另外(而且)„„。 Nowadays,it is common to ______. Many people like ______ because ______. Besi

des ,______. 5. 任何事物都是有两面性,„„也不例外。它既有有利的一面,也有不利的一面Everything has two sides and _____is not an exception,it has both advantages and disadvantages. 6. 关于„„人们的观点各不相同,一些人认为(说)„„,在他们看来,„„

People’s opinions about ______ vary from person to person. Some people say that ______.To them,_____.

7. 人类正面临着一个严重的问题„„,这个问题变得越来越严重。

Man is now facing a big problem ______ which is becoming more and more serious. 8.„„已成为人们关注的热门话题,特别是在年青人当中,将引发激烈的辩论。

______ has become a hot topic among people,especially among the young and heated debates are right on their way.

9. „„在我们的日常生活中起着越来越重要的作用,它给我们带来了许多好处,但同时也引发一些严重的问题。

______ has been playing an increasingly important role in our day-to-day life.it has brought us a lot of benefits but has created some serious problems as well.

10. 根据图表/数字/统计数字/表格中的百分比/图表/条形图/成形图可以看出„„。很显然„„,但是为什么呢?

According to the figure/number/statistics/percentages in the /chart/ba

r graph/line/graph,it can be seen that______ while. Obviously,______,but why?


1. 相反,有一些人赞成„„,他们相信„„,而且,他们认为„„。

On the contrary

,there are some people in favor of ___.At the same time,they say____. 2. 但是,我认为这不是解决„„的好方法,比如„„。最糟糕的是„„。

But I don"t think it is a very good way to solve ____.For example,____.Worst of all,___. 3. „„对我们国家的发展和建设是必不可少的,(也是)非常重要的。首先,„„。而且„„,最重要的是„„

______is necessary and important to our country"s development and construction. First,______. What"s more, _____.Most important of all,______. 4. 有几个可供我们采纳的方法。首先,我们可以„„

There are several measures for us to adopt. First, we can______

5. 面临„„,我们应该采取一系列行之有效的方法来„„。一方面„„,另一方面„„

Confronted with______,we should take a series of effective measures to______. For one thing,______For another,______

6. 早就应该拿出行动了。比如说„„,另外„„。所有这些方法


It is high time that something was done about it. For example. _____.In addition. _____.All these measures will certainly______.

7. 为什么„„?第一个原因是„„;第二个原因是„„;第三个原因是„„。总的来说,„„的主要原因是由于„„

Why______? The first reason is that ______.The second reason is ______.The third is ______.For all this, the main cause of ______due to ______.

8. 然而,正如任何事物都有好坏两个方面一样,„„也有它的不利的一面,象„„。 However, just like everything has both its good and bad sides, ______also has its own disadvantages, such as ______.

9. 尽管如此,我相信„„更有利。

Nonetheless, I believe that ______is more advantageous. 10. 完全同意„„这种观点(陈述),主要理由如下

I fully agree with the statement that ______ because______.


1. 至于我,在某种程度上我同意后面的观点,我认为„„ As far as I am concerned, I agree with the latter opinion to some extent. I think that ____. 2. 总而言之,整个社会应该密切关注„„这个问题。只有这样,我们才能在将来„„。 In a word, the whole society should pay close attention to the

problem of ______.Only in this way can ______in the future.

3. 但是,„„和„„都有它们各自的优势(好处)。例如,„„,而„„。然而,把这两者相比较,我更倾向于(喜欢)„„

But ______and ______have their own advantages. For example, _____, while_____. Comparing this with that, however, I prefer to______.

4. 就我个人而言,我相信„„,因此,我坚信美好的未来正等着我们。因为„„

Personally, I believe that_____. Consequently, I’m confident that a bright future is awaiting us because______.

5. 随着社会的发展,„„。因此,迫切需要„„。如果每个人都愿为社会贡献自已的一份力量,这个社会将要变得越来越好。

With the development of society, ______.So it"s urgent and necessary to ____.If every member is willing to contribute himself to the society, it will be better and better. 6. 至于我(对我来说,就我而言),我认为„„更合理。只有这样,我们才能„„ For my part, I think it reasonable to_____. Only in this way can you _____.

7. 对我来说,我认为有必要„„。原因如下:第一,„„; 第二,„„;最后„„但同样重要的是„„

In my opinion, I think it necessary to____. The reasons are as follows. First _____.Second ______. Last but not least,______.

8. 在总体上很难说„„是好还是坏,因为它在很大程度上取决


It is difficult to say whether _____is good or not in general as it depends very much on the situation of______. However, from a personal point of view find______.

9. 综上所述,我们可以清楚地得出结论„„

From what has been discussed above, we may reasonably arrive at the conclusion that____.

10. 如果我们不采取有效的方法,就可能控制不了这种趋势,就会出现一些意想不到的不良后果,所以,我们应该做的是„„

If we can not take useful means, we may not control this trend, and some undesirable result may come out unexpectedly, so what we should do is_____.