书面表达强化训练(三) 图画作文
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书面表达强化训练(三) 图画作文

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(2015·辽宁省葫芦岛市一模) 如今,随着智能手机和电子设备的普及,“低头族”现象兴起,人们沉溺于手机等电子设备,因而忽略了自己和他人的沟通交流,甚至在家庭聚会上也只顾玩手机而不和长辈聊天,老人感到失落万分,请根据右

图写一篇英语短文。

内容要点如下:

1.描述图画内容;

2.对图中现象加以分析;

3.针对这个现象提出建议。

注意:1. 词数100左右;

2.可适当发挥,以使行文连贯。

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一题两用——借力书面表达,再练短文改错

以下是两篇针对本篇作文的学生习作,每篇中各有十处语言错误,请把它们改正过来。

A

B

答 案

参考范文:

As can be seen from the picture, a big family get together to have a splendid dinner. But when they sit down to table, the young just bury themselves in playing with their cellphones, tablet PCs and other electronic devices, totally ignoring their parents, who feel very lonely and sad.

There is no doubt that cellphones have a negative effect on our lives. Heavy use of cellphones actually widens the distance between teenagers and their elders, leaving the elders more lonely. Worse still, addiction to cellphones might also lead to teenagers’ poor performance at school, which adds to elders’ worries. As far as I’m concerned, it’s necessary to limit the time we spend using cellphones. And I think it important to communicate with our family members face to face, which helps build a harmonious family atmosphere.

A

第一句:去掉it; is→are 第二句:sadly →sad 第三句:can →could 第四句:fact 后加that; a→an 第六句:your →our 第七句:that →it

第九句:to communicate→communicating 第十句:have 后加a

B

第一句:去掉it; alone →lonely 第二句:去掉but; complete →completely 第三句:equipments →equipment 第四句:to communicate→communicating 第五句:in →to; it→which 或在it 前加and 第七句:to communicate→communicating 第八句:build 后加a